I appreciate the crochet part.. probably because I always do it! lol

I loved this, I really like your first stanza and I think it was really strong. Ohh beautiful!

I wonder if people see mine, yours and Narphs poems and wonder why we have such similar ideas ;) hahaah. Love this, chick! So glad you're writing again! :D

Let them wonder..okay.

pppsssst,I'm inlove with this... Miss.

You always said
I infused light
into the dark crevice
you fought so hard to hide

^ I love how you began this with "you always said", as if that was then, and makes me question all is to come, what changes had come

I enjoyed the frost in your touch
for it jolted me to pry my eyes open
each time I began to drift and get tangled
in dreams

^This was reminiscence of times gone by, How once such things were enjoyed and how it made sense, Great stanza

But it seems the cosmos
held another scheme
to keep love at a distance
while teasing with
what-could-have-beens

^The changes we encounter in time, and love and all the things we may have missed, What could have beens are pointless, it wasn't

You always said forever
and I questioned it's
authenticity

^Maybe you were right too question, Love this

but every time the sun tickles you awake
and the moon sways me to slumber

our souls will crochet
into one

^This was a beautiful endind, because changes happen but here it shows that you are still together and still forever.

What a lovely piece,
the flow was flawless,
and oh so beautiful

Love
Tara
xxx

Beautiful ~

Devout aspirations - Concrete hope or strong belief. Nice title.

You always said
I infused light
into the dark crevice
you fought so hard to hide

^ Here the author mentions about his/her lover conveying to the author, as to his/her ability to infuse light with a dark crevice, in other words, focusing light into a fissure.

It means, the lover or the significant other is transparent to the author, even though he/she tries to hide it. And the author receives an acknowledgement about the same in return.

I enjoyed the frost in your touch
for it jolted me to pry my eyes open
each time I began to drift and get tangled
in dreams

^ "frost in your touch" - Could actually indicate goosebumps felt due to the lovers sensual touch.

But with reference to the stanza, here the romantic touch from the lover compels the author to suddenly open his/her eyes, upon drifting and being tangled within dreams, each time.

But it seems the cosmos
held another scheme
to keep love at a distance
while teasing with
what-could-have-beens

^ According to the author it seems as though the cosmos/destiny/fate/time had different intentions/scheme, while separating the love birds, i.e the lovers. And at the same time, giving them a false assure of what could have been, which may include a life time of each others company and a happy ending with occasional ups and downs.

You always said forever
and I questioned it's
authenticity

^ While the lover had always assured the author about his/her quality of feelings, which is laced with the word "forever" suggesting an endless love, lasting an eternity or until the end of time. The author is sure of his/her lovers feelings, but is skeptical of the eternal life together, due to the cosmos being the protagonist. Thus doubting "forever's" credibility.

but every time the sun tickles you awake
and the moon sways me to slumber

^ Every time the lover is awakened by the warmth of the sun, the author is put to sleep by the silver moonlight.

our souls will crochet
into one

^ Here both the souls, of the author and his/her lover will be knitted into one piece by loops of love.

The end from

but every time the sun tickles you awake
and the moon sways me to slumber

to

our souls will crochet
into one

Seems to, not have a bridge between them. The author may have intended it as such, and it does not take away from the poem, it just idk. .feels like the author had skipped a part and arrived directly to the conclusion.

Nonetheless, the end about the souls crocheting into one, is absolutely astounding. It is romance at its maximum intensity.

And the poem is about distant love, lovers separated by distance but not at heart.

I am highly impressed.

This poem intrigued me because I felt the title actually contradicted the content of the poem in a way. Just my thoughts...at the start of this verse I got the impression the person you are talking about/to may find it difficult to commit even although you mention 'forever' further along in the story. To me the frost could mean this person feels love but can't find a way to convey just yet.

Obviously there is a distance between you and I'm not sure whether you were metaphorically speaking were you suggest that they are in a different country and...that's what I liked...you kept me guessing and....at the end I'm still not sure :)

our souls will crochet into one

I really loved this idea....beautiful!

Awwww... this poem is so sweet and was such a delight to read. I really enjoyed it.

I liked the opening stanza... I like the idea of 'infusing light into a dark crevice' that this person tries to hide.

I like the 'frost in your touch' part... it was interesting, and I like how you wrote it 'jolted you to pry your eyes open' It reminded me of being awaken by reality.

I absolutely loved this stanza:

But it seems the cosmos
held another scheme
to keep love at a distance
while teasing with
what-could-have-beens

>> what-could-have-beens!! Something we all relate to... I love how you mention cosmos and keeping things at a distance.

but every time the sun tickles you awake
and the moon sways me to slumber

our souls will crochet
into one

>> the ending was simply beautiful. Amazing!

There is such beauty in the words you have written here and I love this poem

You always said
I infused light
into the dark crevice
you fought so hard to hide
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
I love this first stanza - it makes me think of someone who may have been depressed or unhappy with themselves and here comes this person who gives them this light so they can see themselves differently. They have fallen in love

The ending is superb. I love the idea of two becoming one.

What a lovely poem!!!

x

You always said
I infused light
into the dark crevice
you fought so hard to hide

Possibly my favorite stanza, I can relate to this so well.
This was an excellent poem, the flow was smooth, rippled gently with strong emotions. Excellent piece of work As always

I should not read romantic poems as they make me emotional. This one made me sad in a bittersweet way. I hope it wasn't always to be apart?
I really enjoy the words and the order they are in and after all that is all we can say about a poem.
Excellent.