Comments : Sunshine's Moon

  • 5 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Omg,, I couldnt help but nominate this Lol Larry indeed such a cure for my last night :P

    I love it all, each single part of it, added to my favorites, I will make the whole family read this.
    I love the sense of humor in the last part, actually it made me really happy
    I love how your wording in the 1st verse helps
    us visualize the image of the moon in a very peaceful sense!

    You really know sunshine, very well, Larry Larry!

    edit: as a side note, thank you for using yellow" :P :D

  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Larry-

    What a pretty and fun piece...such a precious write... The poem makes the reader smile...from beginning to end.... if a person is in a bad mood, they won't be after reading this piece, very nice ~

  • 5 years ago

    by Meme

    I agree, such a sweet and happy piece. Takes you from sad to happy after only one read. Super cute :)

    But now I am jealous Larry, I want a poem too @_@
    LOL, just kidding :P

    <3

  • 5 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Loved the rhyming structure along with the theme. Smooth choice of words. Most of the poems i read are with too strong content, very rarely anyone bring a smile upon face, glad i came across this one.

    all the best and take care

  • 5 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    The rhyme was stellar, and it flowed smooth and easy.
    your wording was almost magical . I can't say more just I really enjoyed it

  • 5 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Amazing 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Failing Stoic

    At first, I was confused by "Sunshine, see the moon" then, my brain switched on and I realised, "sunshine" is the person you are speaking to. This was an adorable write. The last stanza in particular, made my heart warm. Ducks are my soft spot, my weakness, I love them. I use them a lot in my writing and they remind me of someone very dear to me. Your poem, although about someone I do not know very well, reminds me of what is important to me, so I thank you

  • 5 years ago

    by shadow

    It made me super happy.i do not see many happy poems most are sad. im definitly hoping i can be a good poet like you one day.

  • 5 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Sunshine, see the moon
    high, yellow and waning,
    fills night's sky sustaining
    lest you sleep too soon.

    ^Descriptive, picturesque, wonderful start to a beautiful piece.

    Do not tarry over books,
    find your life love soon
    he'll sing a precious tune
    while taking in your looks.

    ^Creative little stanza with a nice use of heads up to your friend.

    Brings you in the dark
    great fortune and luck,
    then, sunny little duck,
    you will sing like a lark.

    ^Stunning, simple end. Excellent job.

    The word choice is so simple yet this piece has such amazing imagery and descriptions. It was hopeful and heartfelt.
    I love how your rhymes are so smooth and unforced.

    5/5

    MRK

  • 5 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    This poem cheers me up, I loveee reading it over and over again.

    thank youuuuuuu Larrryyyyyyy

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    I can see why Nana is cheered by this piece; its heart warming, enchanting and makes one full of joy. This is a wonderfully crafted work of a veteran. Describing one of natures ever glorious, the 'Sun'. Very peachy and crisp and lovely descriptions of natures art, 'Sunshine'. Your truly an inspiration to all, a perfectionist that has exquisite poetic musings. Appealing to the eyes with beautiful wordings and soothing to the ears, rhyming smoothly. All i want now is to see an illustration to it. Such an exuberating piece of art, I'm inlove with this. Remain blessed Sir Larry, humble respects and gratitude; for sharing such an awesome piece. Peace, bye.

  • 5 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    <3 thank you