Omg,, I couldnt help but nominate this Lol Larry indeed such a cure for my last night :P
I love it all, each single part of it, added to my favorites, I will make the whole family read this.
I love the sense of humor in the last part, actually it made me really happy
I love how your wording in the 1st verse helps
us visualize the image of the moon in a very peaceful sense!
You really know sunshine, very well, Larry Larry!
edit: as a side note, thank you for using yellow" :P :D
At first, I was confused by "Sunshine, see the moon" then, my brain switched on and I realised, "sunshine" is the person you are speaking to. This was an adorable write. The last stanza in particular, made my heart warm. Ducks are my soft spot, my weakness, I love them. I use them a lot in my writing and they remind me of someone very dear to me. Your poem, although about someone I do not know very well, reminds me of what is important to me, so I thank you
6 years ago
It made me super happy.i do not see many happy poems most are sad. im definitly hoping i can be a good poet like you one day.
6 years ago
Sunshine, see the moon
high, yellow and waning,
fills night's sky sustaining
lest you sleep too soon.
^Descriptive, picturesque, wonderful start to a beautiful piece.
Do not tarry over books,
find your life love soon
he'll sing a precious tune
while taking in your looks.
^Creative little stanza with a nice use of heads up to your friend.
Brings you in the dark
great fortune and luck,
then, sunny little duck,
you will sing like a lark.
^Stunning, simple end. Excellent job.
The word choice is so simple yet this piece has such amazing imagery and descriptions. It was hopeful and heartfelt.
I love how your rhymes are so smooth and unforced.
I can see why Nana is cheered by this piece; its heart warming, enchanting and makes one full of joy. This is a wonderfully crafted work of a veteran. Describing one of natures ever glorious, the 'Sun'. Very peachy and crisp and lovely descriptions of natures art, 'Sunshine'. Your truly an inspiration to all, a perfectionist that has exquisite poetic musings. Appealing to the eyes with beautiful wordings and soothing to the ears, rhyming smoothly. All i want now is to see an illustration to it. Such an exuberating piece of art, I'm inlove with this. Remain blessed Sir Larry, humble respects and gratitude; for sharing such an awesome piece. Peace, bye.