Comments : Hollow Men - Glosa

  • 6 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    LOVE this form....

    This poem sings a powerful message! I do love your life pieces, they really make me think and ponder... well done~

  • 6 years ago

    by Meme

    Woooow Larry!

    You are the best teacher there can ever be, you always bring to our attention new forms and type of poetry. I have to say I learned alot of new stuff from you.

    Ok back to the poem, I found it really interesting that it quoted a different poem at its first part and then your thoughts just escaladed part by part. Its like you are excavating the message you wanted to convey with every next verse following the first one.

    I just enjoy reading through your words of wisdom.

  • 6 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Larry I respect anyone that can write this format. I was challenged a long time ago by our dear Hellon. I completed it but I had migrants for months haha

    Excellent job

  • 6 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    This, too, was a challenge by Hellon. I have to say it was more difficult than I expected. The real trick is to both stay within the meaning of the original cabeza, yet reflect on the transformation in understanding brought about in the 8 decades since Elliot wrote it.

  • 6 years ago

    by Hellon

    First of all...well done in taking up my challenge. What a grand job you have done with it too!

    This reminded me of your Hornblower poem which is one of my all time favourites from you. Loud Applaude!

  • 6 years ago

    by Lioness

    This looks to me like the hardest formed poetry I've seen and you have met this challenge amazingly!!!

    The way you have written it, I am sure it was hard but you made it look so easy!!!

    Well done :)


  • 6 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Larry, I've never attempted a glosa, maybe I will one day
    but seriously it looks hard, but you made it look easy, if possible.

    A really well done piece,
    a great example xx

  • 6 years ago

    by Decayed

    I think I've read like this form in Arabian poetry at school, and I do remember the teacher saying it originates from Al Andalus (the Arab ruled Spain).
    Excellent job in that.

  • 6 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Abed, that would fit with the time frame of 14th & 15th Centuries, since that was when the Moors controlled the Iberian Peninsula.
    Interesting 'gloss' on the background. Thanks.

  • 6 years ago

    by Karla

    Larry - this piece is superb.

  • 6 years ago

    by CuteThingsGoneWrong

    Jeez. And from what i can tell this is Amazing. I don't understand how you did that and i wont ask. Now im tasked with commenting on this huh? Ohh jeez.

    the way you did it..> Was amazing I see the rhyming very well and it didnt take away from the poem (Hard to do with something thats already so difficult)

    I love the flow of the poem, It was near perfect for what you were trying to do. Now i think the few bumps when i was reading it was my own personal faults... but there were a few (like two that im having issues finding so its probably just me *sigh)

    I feel like this form is very hard to do without it getting to WORDY, you did very well on that aspect, it still feels like a poem.

    Also i like overall mood that i get when i read it. Its hard to describe it perfectly. WHen reading it, its complex enough that i look deeply into what you wrote and i really understand what it meant...

    I could go on and on..

    But pretty much all im saying is you got a 5/5 :3

  • 6 years ago

    by christopher

    Well done larry great poem. structured brilliantly and rhyming coherently but the flow of this poem impressed. a rhythm of of perfect timing you achieved with this poem and in no doubt deserved the win. well done again.

  • 6 years ago

    by Rihanna

    Excellent poem..

  • 6 years ago

    by Lostlove1

    Congratulations Larry on your win!! Well deserved. I loved this have done it to perfection. It is impossible to pinpoint my favorite part of it-as the whole poem shines beautifully in every way. Be proud Larry, of this poem chock full of wisdom throughout each line. Very much enjoyed. WRITE ON my friend. :) Great job.