Comments : A Repose of Art

  • 5 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Wow!! This is utterly beautiful, I loved the essence of nature in the piece, the idea that we are at one with life is so uplifting.

    It's such a creative piece and I'm moved by your words,

    Love you xxxx

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Thanks so much for you kind words. This piece means alot to each and everyone of us. Hugs :) ...

  • 5 years ago

    by Meme

    WOOOOOOW !!!
    Yakori this is breathtaking, I agree with Tara, the use of nature elements just brought the whole piece to life. I feel I am such in a tranquil place after reading this.

    One suggestion though,
    "Colliding thier fate,
    to fish for the that orchid."
    ^^
    I think you meant to write those lines like this:
    "Colliding their fate,
    to fish for that orchid"

    Perfecto my friend :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Thanks Meme for the lovely words, i'm grateful. Thanks for bringing it to my notice too, its a typing error. Blessings. ;-).

  • 5 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    You have a very beautiful way with words, a very unique style of wording them, and definitely a very classy level of thoughts.

    your tribute, was penned with natural and deep metaphors, a very high sense of creativity!

    I love it Yakori! I love it so much, thanks for being yourself, you too :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Nana dear, such lovely and inspiring words of praise. I'm grateful. Blessings dear :) , Jazakallah...

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    Yakori, it's an amazing tribute to LTFR.. Bless you :)

    I LOVE your descriptions so damn much.

    But a suggestion, I saw you're writing: thier .. it's their.

    And I noticed also the capitalizing of 'i' in its and in sometimes.

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Thanks for the comment, i am grateful. I'll look into the errors, thanks for the notice, . Gods blessings to you. :-) ..

  • 5 years ago

    by Pain

    I like this part well done
    Together, forever,
    In the path of spring.
    For the beauty of words.
    Home of continents.
    Forms ripples of haven.

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Thanks for the comment, I'm grateful.

  • 5 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I really enjoyed reading this. It was a blessing in it's self..Excellent my friend

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Thanks loads for the comment, bless you.

  • 5 years ago

    by christopher

    I liked this yakori well done you were inspired here and your gift shined. i also got the snse of pearl divers from this piece of work and the words were delightful only negative is the length of poem.

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    @Berry sister, thanks for your sweet words, I'm glad u popped by, Lovely Poetess.Hugs. @Christopher, I'm immensely grateful. Your words are supportive. Stay blessed.

  • 5 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow... I'm speechless... I don't even know what to say! This poem is beautiful, filled with amazing imagery, and such nicely chosen words and metaphors... I was captivated from the start to the end. I think I want to reread it because I just loved the scene you painted with your words.

    This stanza was brilliant:

    "They spot a waterfall,
    that cascades ideas,
    into the edge of the river.
    Colliding their fate,
    to fish for that orchid."

    I also really loved this one:

    "Together, forever,
    In the path of spring.
    For the beauty of words.
    Home of continents.
    Forms ripples of haven. "

    And the ending was flawless... Amazing poem and what an amazing tribute to LTFR <3

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Thanks alot for the lovely comment, i appreciate. Blessings to you dear, hugs. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    It's fascinating to me how someone whose first language is not English brings fresh word connections to a beautiful poem: 'swift of dawn' and 'They acquaint in the process' bring to the table images I would never have thought of.

    Again, 'Colliding their fate' is both dynamic and subtly brings in the sense of jostling for space and the negotiation of friendships formed for a common purpose. You combine the concepts of the hunt for a goal with the water theme when you describe it as fishing for the orchid.

    The orchid itself, if you reference our resident genius' manual (Meme of course) symbolizes Magnificence, Love, Beauty, Refinement. All of these are qualities that define our community. I suspect though, that you take this flower, which is often a golden hue, to represent our founder and muse.

    You have a description of the travelers gathering around together and it appears you show them forming a mosaic of the orchid itself. Very creative. Peraps you might rewrite this portion to draw out the allusion/illusion.

    Altogether a creative and original work. Great job!

  • 5 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Thanks a bunch 'Veteran Godfather'. I appreciate your wonderful and inspiring comments. Blessings to you Sir with my humble respect. :-).