Comments : Love when u miss

  • 12 years ago

    by SkYler BabIe for EvEr andAlways

    This is cute but need a little help

  • 12 years ago

    by Baittl Bakeer

    Yeah actully i was busy when i write it so u know

  • 12 years ago

    by Baittl Bakeer

    Yeah actully i was busy when i write it so u know

  • 12 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    OMGoodness you are a good writer

  • 12 years ago

    by Rihanna

    I loved this poem and thought it was cute and sweet

    I love u when i think about u i love u when i feel love i live u when i get sick i love u when i feel happy i love u in all things i do so be with me :)

    Maybe change it to

    I love you
    Every time i think about you

    i love you
    whenever i feel love

    i love you
    when i get sick

    i love you
    when i feel happy

    i love you
    in all things i do
    so be with me? :)

    Just fixed it up abit
    Grammar and the structure
    Just my opinion I think it flows better

    But all in all
    Great poem hun!
    5/5