Oh TJ what a beautiful and gorgeous image you have penned.
The word virgin in relation to a waterfall reminds me of something being pure and fresh. At first when I looked at the title I was like ooohhhh this may be a sensual poem but then I noticed that it was in the nature section and realised I was wrong.
I love the word ripples. It makes me think of still water and then pebbles being thrown in there to cause beautiful and simple synchronised ripples. Using the words crystalline pond it gives me with an image of this beautiful crystal clear water that you usually see in the tropics. That gorgeous water on those islands that make you want to go on a holiday and get depressed that you're still at work right now... that type of image. I love it.
Sun kissed eloquence sounds so poetic to me. I absolutely love it. I'd imagine the sun shining on the water and the blue crystal water is even more noticeable. When sun hits water I find that it makes things even more clearer.
This poem is pure bliss.
AWESOME write TJ.
6 years ago
You da man, TJ
i love the green vibes this small, neat piece sends to me. Gorgeous images, starting with a measured spatial order, from the waterfall, to the pond, then to what's upon the bond and beside it. Every line carries certain colors, certain sounds. Lovely and eloquent.
In this poem I sense something..I think you have that unique quality of keeping the child in you alive. I have that quality too and it enables me to sail through every storm. As soon as I wake up at 6 AM and go outside I am amazed about all and feel so happy to be alive and when I am in places no one goes too, it is even stronger. This world is a paradise and you have captured that knowledge in so few words..well done, TJ:)
liquid stars spatter
Sun kissed eloquence
Magic:) eloquence is indeed the word!
6 years ago
by Lifeless Doll
Wooow all I can sense about this poem is purity and freshness, it is very creative and intelligent, wonderful imagery :)
6 years ago
by Ronel McCarthy
Smooth bro ! Captivating title/theme :)
6 years ago
by Ms Happiness
Wow I reeally loved ur woed choice too:)
Great poem TJ:)
First of all the title is misleading, lol, but does grab the attention of a reader. Applying the word virgin to a waterfall tells me that it is a pristine, unspoiled waterfall, one that humans have not unearthed or ruined. The image of the water cascading down into the clear pond of water at the bottom and comparing the splatters to liquid stars is excellent. I could see the sun dancing off the water and water lilies floating around the pond, soaking up the sun. These few lines give the reader more images than we can possibly process at one time. I have to say this might be one of the best poems you have written.
Wow I really live this,,,it puts like great an maybe abstract well for me simi abstract imagery...full of colors that dance an swirl in ur mind and the words twist an vine it perfectness,,great job 5/5 :0)
A delightful read, the title catches one but the content is a twist but very consuming. What a beautiful description of 'waterfall' you made here. I like the smooth flow and your wordings were just marvelous. However, though this is a nature theme it can be incorporated into the title 'virgin' but indirectly. I love this; undiluted water flowing in a serene aura, pure and natural. Excellent, blessings to you, Cheers!
6 years ago
Nature is pure, breathtaking, and unstoppable. Lovely poem, 5/5
The use of azure is kind of hard in my opinion to pull off in a poem. It usually lacks the kind of flow most words put off. With that being said, you have done an amazing job with this. The imagery is stunning as only you and very few can do when writing nature poems.
This was beautiful and very interesting. I loved how it was very descriptive without sounding like you were trying too hard. great job! and thanks for commenting on my poems...i would love it if u could read my poem called "By His Side" cuz I really respect your opinion.
What a nature beauty! The author describes what nature is: beautiful, innocent, and untouched- Love the title! This piece is elegant, soft and just breathtaking. What is more pure than a waterfall? I can visualize the water fall flowing and ending in an enchanting pond. The mixture of stars and lilies dancing made ME feel like dancing... the entire nature scene is right in front of my eyes as I'm reading. The Poet simply dazzled me... and left me feeling peaceful. I truly felt like I was in paradise, well done TJ-