Comments : The Puzzle

  • 6 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Very well done, TJ. Your metaphor transforms the experience from frustration to intrigue, from perplexity to perspicuity.
    First two stanzas. Faced with difficulty, you attempt, as all of us, to make sense of the conflict, to right it, but are frustrated with the results because nothing you do helps and the frustrated reactions simply make things worse.

    Third stanza. You realize there are factors you have not taken into account. You see 'her' side of things and the relative understanding transforms the entire dispute into something new. You begin to comprehend.

    Fourth stanza. When we let go our preconceived & rigid stances, true knowledge gives rise to mutual understanding and acceptance. Feelings are rekindled that never should have been diverted, there is renewal.

  • 6 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Well did Larry leave me anything to say ? lol

    Like he said I love the metaphor you used here. I really liked how you started off being sad and frustrated and then by the end of the poem you compared love to the puzzle stating once you find it the pieces to your life starts to come together...beautiful

    seriously, well done I enjoyed evey line...

    p.s....I thought the line about the friends advice was a great touch...anyone whose been through a break up or through a hard time knows what its like to have friends try to help you through..excellent

  • 6 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    I love this. I like dyour flow and the whole organisation of the poem. I also like the heart you gave the piece.

    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Love the puzzle metaphor...... love can be confusing and miss matched and then it all falls into place... Oh I love this!!

  • 6 years ago

    by Girl of Conviction

    Basically what larry said :] great piece!

    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Karla

    Bowing to my King again.Stunning piece!

  • 6 years ago

    by Lioness

    TJ, I always love your writes. I love the images in this one and the metaphors. The rhyming and flow was awesome as well!

    Loved it!

    x

  • 6 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow I loved it and it was sad to great and positive :) amazing piece. :) 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Mattias Ostling

    TJ, this one was amazing. I *loved* the rhymes, so incredibly well penned.

    The first two stanzas felt *so* familiar. And I loved the "happy ending". Great job.

  • 6 years ago

    by tainted melody

    I love your writing style...it has such flow and rythem, and i thought it was really interesting how you incorporated the comparison of love to a puzzle. And also made that comparison unique :)