Of the darkness = it's better sound-wise if you remove 'the'

---------- This was really incredibly written. I can see the stars shining, the aura of darkness, and most of all, the last scenery; as if it was a movie, and The END was displayed above you on earths 'pillow' as you beautifully described.

Such harmony and magic reflected by your words.

What I love is that this is a beautiful love poem but the elements of nature that you have both hinted within the words are mesmerizing. Such a beautiful poem

Awesome images! Love the feeling I got while reading it

Well done you two!

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I do not know why, but I really like the title, maybe it's because I like both words as they are and together they seem to work very well too. It creates some sort of image and I have to admit, that I thought the poem would be negative, which is probably because darkness has a negative connotation, at least to me it does.

I actually agree with Abed about removing "the" in verse four because it would flow better. :)

That is the only thing I'd change too, I think you both cooperate very well together and I love the harmony that radiates from this poem. Absolutely beautiful :)

What a soothing seamless collab you two. Your carefully chosen words painted such beautiful imagery. I could see these two lovers as I read. Awesome :) and so well done!
Lostlove~ :)

As I said to Olwin, it is a sensual poem that has a tender tone to it. A read with a smooth flow and has incorporated the beauty of nature with love which makes it even more...magical perhaps..anyways enjoyed the read :)