Comments : While You Were Sleeping

  • 6 years ago

    by Lofallenve

    My Sun and Stars,

    As I read this, it sounded like a song in my head. These words are beautiful, it truly brought tears to my eyes.

    "I can feel your heart beat,
    Even now as I fall to sleep.
    Our hearts together is a song on repeat,
    A sweet rhythm I hope we always keep.
    My love, do you feel what I say?"

    This stanza. To answer, yes, everyday I feel what you say. I loved this one though. This poem, I love how it rhymes, it just flows so musically.
    I cried.
    I loved it. I love you. <3

  • 6 years ago

    by Faith Ann

    Very cute

  • 6 years ago

    by Amber

    This is a wonderful poems very well written

  • 6 years ago

    by Randy East

    Isnt it amazing how the love of someone can inspire the soul. I can see how much you love her in the honesty of this poem. great job

  • 6 years ago

    by Alyssa Rianne

    So beautiful