Oh wow O.0 the imagery was great! Loved it keep writing!

Oh, teenager is the most excited stage because at this stage started all the curiosity about crushes or love, about friends and things evolve in teenager and I like the way you write here--seventeen--hmmm..your poem is kinda excited to read, there is something tags me in every line to depict the imagery here..maybe because I am not longer seventeen (17), haha! And, in reading this stuff of yours my imagination flash backward when I am seventeen.....I like you the word of choice...natural and simple. Over all, great piece!
5/5-C

I have a weird feeling you're turning seventeen soon ;)

The descriptive words and vivid imagery made this a delight to read. But a little error grammatically in the beginning. The first sentence is a sentence fragment. Really off putting, to be honest as it was the start. Shame, it has a crisp language and a sort of nostalgic feeling to it, so consider revision there.

I really like how you ended this one, though. After giving the reader a perspective of what it felt like being sixteen, a shift of tone revealed that the persona doesn't feel any 'change', perhaps after turning seventeen. I love your play with tone and emotion here.
Overall a great read. Keep writing :)
-X

Really?? Advance Happy Birthday!
You're old jk.. Don't worry, i don't forget gifts ;)

FREAKING LOVE THIS....

Loved the way you talked, loved how it was choppy but not choppy it all. Loved the metaphors. Loved how you described this. Loved the touch of "it was a talk with your father"....I loved every bit of this.....reminds me of talks with my dad and high school memories of cute boys and b-i-t-chy teen girls.....thanks for taking me back :)

Great write!!

Noura,

You just write with so much feeling, soo much of this I understand, so much of this breaks my heart, but Happy Birthday for Sunday, My Dear...

You are just awesome!!!!!!!!!

Hello lovely!

This poem was awesome. I felt like it was a way to get to know you a little deeper. The images you've used and the descriptions are so in depth I love it. I think the memories must mean something to you because of the way you wrote about them.

I love these types of poems that are so personal because you end up feeling like you have more of a connection with the writer.

Awesome hun,

LOVED IT!!!!!!

x