Comments : Asking Avery

  • 11 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Jad, I am not going to write a lot about this. Your words moved me so much and they show such a growth and maturity in your work. This was your best ever.

  • 11 years ago

    by Sunshine

    You are one of my favorite authors, your sad poetry always left something inside of me that i couldnt express by words, do you remember when i wrote a poem instead of a comment before ? lol well that;s how it feels right now!

    this is awesome, sad, deep, truthful...i love it Austin. this is a master piece, nominating it next week

  • 11 years ago

    by Meme

    Let me keep this simple, I LOVED IT!!

    I got so many feelings out of this piece, you sadness truly shows in your words.

    "So how has your bittersweet name, Avery
    become the broken reflection of me? "
    ^^
    The wondering in this line is so heartbreaking :(

    There is a hint of my style in writing in yours, and I like that alot.

    5/5
    Great job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Jad made me all teary with this piece... I read it several times and each time I could feel the pain of a broken heart... His detailed design within each stanza just left my heart hurting. The pain of a broken heart and ending a relationship is so painful that in reality it can create powerful and heart gripping poetry... This poem deserves to be highlighted... the flow of each line was very pretty and elegant... I love that within a poem... Well Done Jad