A lovely tribute to your club. Again, I think the rhymes were un-forced. The simple word choice really made this piece stand out, and of course, rhyming is hard when you use complicated words, so this is nice. Punctuation is well-placed. This shows strength and new-found conviction. A great read. Keep writing!
5 years ago
I enjoyed the rhymes, they seem to come really easy to you. I also liked the fact that in the poem is mention that "I might be fallen but not broken" to me is like it's saying that it can live without that someone. Also it shows that time is our best friend and the one we should go for advice when a relationship has not worked out.