Comments : Fallen but not Broken

  • 5 years ago

    by Silent Girl

    Best poem ever fallen but not broken :) 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by La Reina De Corazones

    That is sooo cute! :) and nice wording and putting the club's name in there lol

  • 5 years ago

    by ArtistrySoul

    Nice constructed poem. Yes! its difficult to get over someone with time, but we all end up with the right person

  • 5 years ago

    by Lofallenve

    I like how you ended it.
    But I don't think the all caps fits too well at the end.
    I think wording the ending could be better.
    maybe
    "I may be fallen,
    But I am not broken."
    Or something like that.

    I do love it though. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Cardwell

    Thank you for the critique :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    A lovely tribute to your club. Again, I think the rhymes were un-forced. The simple word choice really made this piece stand out, and of course, rhyming is hard when you use complicated words, so this is nice. Punctuation is well-placed. This shows strength and new-found conviction. A great read. Keep writing!
    -X

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    I enjoyed the rhymes, they seem to come really easy to you. I also liked the fact that in the poem is mention that "I might be fallen but not broken" to me is like it's saying that it can live without that someone. Also it shows that time is our best friend and the one we should go for advice when a relationship has not worked out.

  • 5 years ago

    by Cardwell

    In all truth and honesty, I use the rhymer application at the top of this website a lot! I feel ashamed :P

  • 5 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Great piece! no matter how many times you are pushed down, you always stand back up in some way! 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    "In all truth and honesty, I use the rhymer application at the top of this website a lot! I feel ashamed :P "

    Lol, even so, everyone needs a little help.
    I used the dictionary or thesaurus, it comes in handy.

  • 5 years ago

    by Emma from the Netherlands

    I like this one too, it's short but very powerful.

  • 5 years ago

    by Lauren denbow

    Wow this is really relatable except I havent got back up.../: