Edited: I think I got to emotional, I'll be back with a comment.

........ There are things that happen in life, that are so darn difficult to express or even write about... you have captivated me with expressing the things that people try to ignore... speaking out... about a broken memory, even touching on it can be part of the healing process... Your elegant way of writing to me there to you as you penned this... touching write Liz- <3

Liz, the number six i know holds pain for you, and we always want to forget, I want to forget each day...so I get you

This is one of those poems that you can't critique because it is raw and emotional and true, and perfect

xxxx

Liz, this is :'(

Even my heart is
swaying against my
forbidden memories
and I feel trapped
within the walls of
my own mind,
^^
the image of a heart swaying against forbidden memories is beyond brilliant. Usually sway is used in a happy moment, but tou definitly took it to another place right here ..

They ignored me
hoping it would
disappear, which
it did.

For them.
^^
Yes, people tend to forget, or not to even think about it. But the one who is in that situation can never forget. The memories will always hunt them back, and often you surrender to those thoughts and they weaken you.

Really sad, but tatill strong and deep piece.

I love the word "sway", I do not know why, but it sounds as if it was filled with ease and a really light action, but then reading the connection of "sway" and "heart", I realized that is can be quite different too. I mean usually we do not control our heart, nor our mind, both tends to control us. Knowing that it sways shows that it wants change, that it might be agitated.

It's obvious that you've been carrying this around with you for a while and felt the urge to share it without actually revealing what it is, but you definately underline that you did not forget as they might have. With each of your words the pain you undergo is portrayed, but you found the strenght to talk about it in some way even though you want to forget nonetheless.

It seems like by forgetting you'd do them more of a favor than yourself because you certainly can't forget, you'd push it aside and rpetend that it doesn't bother you any longer, to make sure they're fine, while it's eating you from inside out.

I do not know whether this is "just" a poem or reality, but either way I'd recommend you to talk about it and then find a way to deal with it instead of trying to forget, it will be tough, but worth it. I know you're a very strong woman and I believe in you.

5/5 always cuz ur poems are always amazingly written

Touching poem Liz.

I love the title. I can feel so much pain reading these words. :( I know all of us have things we want to forget that just keeps playing repeat on inside our head and heart forever.

I came across this yesterday, and I still don't know what or how to comment..
This just captures sadness and beauty perfectly. It is personal, not all of us go through what you do and not everyone would understand, but still, this is a relatable piece.

'Even my heart is swaying against my forbidden memories and I feel trapped within the walls of my own mind, where I can never be set free.'
^'Swaying' connotes a gentle movement, something so involuntary. And when I come across that word, I imagine something gently moved/blown by a gentle breeze. But the way you penned that here was quite different and unique. It's as though it's fast-paced instead of 'gentle'.

'You see there's this image.'
^With just five words, you managed to leave me breathless. It's like a warning, or a start of a story that gives suspense.

'This disturbing picture which has taken grasp of my life and released venom deep within my blooded veins, and it's where
everything began.'
^Heart-breaking :( One of the most depressing stanzas I've read in a while, but still, it is beautiful. Hm, should 'blooded' be 'bloodied'?

'I was six.'
^Again, a little sentence. Yet heart-breaking and filled with emotion.

'They ignored me hoping it would disappear, which it did.
For them.
Maybe this time
I want to forget
too.'
^The ending's certainly sad, yet there was a hint of hope within the last sentence.
Overall, I love this piece for its powerful emotional impact though it was/is sad. The simple word choice complimented the sad tone. Great job. Keep writing :)
-X

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Also, I want to nominate this. But it's only Tuesday and I used two of my votes already! Awesome poems this week. If no one nominates this by Friday, I will :)

I officially announce, that I hate sad poems, because they make me cry. But I love them cause they're true feeling, poured in a poem making it so special.

Bad memories can be so harsh on us, specially those that happened when we ate kids, cause they'll always have an effect on us, even id we forgot them.
Wish you the best<3
An amazing poem, written by an amazing person:)

Outstanding! I really enjoyed reading this poem. I really felt for you in this piece and my heart goes out to you if this poem is based on a true story.

"They ignored me
hoping it would
disappear, which
it did.

For them."

^

My favorite part

5/5