Comments : Above the Snow

  • 6 years ago

    by Khalid

    Nice rhyming! Enjoyed reading.

  • 6 years ago

    by Lofallenve

    Beautifully written. The flow is just amazing as you go through. The imagery is amazing as well. But it is incredibly sad too... :(

  • 6 years ago

    by Darren

    Great pace to this, flows very nicely, It almost gets sadder as you read on.
    Its a great depression poem, depicts the mind of somebody battling their own demons.
    I like the last line the best.

    As an alternative meaning to the last line it could be read as somebody who doesn't want to be pure. Snow is seen as a pure substance nice clean and crisp and sparkling white. To want to dangle above suggest you are not sure you fully want to tread this path.

    Just what I get from this, I may be wrong.

    Nice write and good rhyming.

  • 6 years ago

    by XxLastHopexX

    I love the set up for the poems. You end the poem very strong:

    "Someday soon enough
    I would have you know
    That the high branch will bow
    And my feet will dangle above the snow"

    I love these lines. keep it up.