Oh such sadness :( I love the image that you have here of mending a broken bird but then the bird leaving you. You may not be talking about a literal bird but the metaphor is awesome.

LOVED IT!!!

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Wow, your choice of words in this piece is beautiful. I felt the metaphors were well thought of and beautifully written

Aww, thats is so sad but so beautiful. I loved the repitition of " away from my cadence" this worked really well and stressed the point that after all you done for him, he left.

Nice work.