Comments : Solitary

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    Beautiful peine Xanthe,

    "solitary" despise being a short piece had something that captivated me since the first read and the second one it drew me in even more.

    "I limped back home tonight
    after running away from you."

    -this lines gave me a sense of sadness as I started imagine someone walking back home with difficulty. I couldn't help myself but wonder why the persona was running away, rather from who?
    And I liked that, the starting part was perfect to draw my attention right away. It fulfilled its purposed. Hence, I wanted to keep reading.

    "Mud-sodden shoes, I took off
    at last. Only to find you, Agony,
    stuck between ridges of my soles
    once more."

    -- mud-sodden shoes hinted my mind to think about the rain, and whenever I think about the rain, I connect it right away with sadness ( not sure why). In any case, when I read this lines, it gave me a sense of relief. The persona was relief to finally have reached home. However, it gave me the idea that perhaps after taking off the shoes flashbacks reminded the persona of the reason why he/she was running away and from whom he/she was. Hence, Agony came once again.

    "I contemplated
    scraping you out yet thought
    otherwise, for you acted as my
    compeer when even poetry was
    missing from the streets of my
    thumbprint."

    --- this part made me wonder a lot. because I could only think that the persona was remembering this someone and the mud is a metaphor for this someone. So perhaps, this someone was really important for the persona. So the persona thought before scraping the mud from the shoes. Since this someone might have been a bestfriend perhaps? And is difficult to let go.

    I watched you
    pierce my sole with a shard of
    a past I've long ago broken.
    And you smiled yet I felt nothing
    still...

    --- with this lines, it made me believe that perhaps that someone betrayed the persona, or there is something else but I'm not sure. But I can feel a sense of anger, sadness, yet like empty feeling in those words.

    I knew then that even Agony left me tonight.

    --- this part made me believe tht the persona finally scraped the mud from the shoes and hence also managed to let go of that someone. In a way, this poem could be seen as sad, but if more thought is put into. There is a sense of relief and even though this someone is alone at least there is no more agony.

    Well done, I'm sure this short piece has more depth than what I am thinking. Nice details and also nice way of connecting the ideas and the feelings.

    That's what this piece has.. There is an opposition in thoughts, I'm not sure how to call it. This piece can be sad and it reads sad feelings but agony is gone. :)
    It reminded me of the saying :" it's better to be alone than with bad company" this poem perhaps is about something else, but as many times that I have read it, towards the end it gives me relief. Well done.. Sorry if I misunderstood the meaning.

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    It's really good. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Solitary puts me in the mood of playing cards. Taking a chance to either win or lose.
    If winning the game all the agony has been put aside.
    I love the idea and title well chosen.
    You can't win unless you take a chance
    to gamble.
    Isn't that what life is all about? A gamble
    powerful write

  • 5 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I think one needs to read this twice because after the first reading your a little blown away that it deserves a second look so you can really appreciate the seriousness, and creativity of this poem...

    I love what you have penned by saying you are completely alone that now, even agony has left you. That was just brilliant.

    I tell you what the best part of this poem was,
    "you acted as my
    compeer when even poetry was
    missing from the streets of my
    thumbprint"

    Amazinggggggg metaphor...just amazing. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    Ohh
    still small bubble in my eyes, glad I anit a woman, then the makeup would run.
    a small piece of you here, wonderful and new

  • 5 years ago

    by Karla

    Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.

  • 5 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Your tone in here made the poem come alive for me. I enjoyed the flow of it, and I LOVE the metaphors. This is a container of heartfelt sadness. Amazing job Xanthe:)

  • 5 years ago

    by Max

    *sigh*
    This is amazing write
    I just don't know what to say more that awesome lol

    perfectly written and I love it

    (sorry comment is bad I know)
    anyway keep it up =)