Comments : The Toothache

  • 5 years ago

    by Wild flower

    The title cought my attention, and I wanted to read this poem. It is BRILLIANT, the idea is amazing. I love everything about it. Awesome job:)

  • 5 years ago

    by The Princess

    Ouch. This poem needs a dentist not a comment, Larry. Which makes me wonder, have you seen one lately?

    • 5 years ago

      by Larry Chamberlin

      Actually it started out as a verbal torture for Nana.

  • 5 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Hahahah God Larry....I was so happy that I haven't read the post in the club before I slept that night, because when I read it along with zahra's and Josh's posts... I wondered whether to cry or laugh.

    you should start thinking of acting in SAW movie...haha seriously....this is too descriptive you know, and I think it really does need a very stable head :P to come up with that imagination, not everyone can describe something with that quality of details.
    It may seem funny, and well weird, but very deep!

    Then comes your evil...mind:

    n the quiet,
    lying in bed,
    no distractions,

    LIKE seriously ? ya thanks I did not know that -_- lol, beautiful Larry, and so factual.

    this isn't just a verb in gerund form, no. It is a very smart way to describe the situation, because it does really throb! Tick..tack...oh God... :(


    You can feel the sensitive
    gum tissue

    press painfully

    on the nerve


    yes press painfully on the nerve, are so evil.

    with each pulse

    in red agony
    red agony!!!this was very well thought of, you changed disgusting stuff into metaphors. Aint that just magical ?

    And actually the fact that your last lines are so true, realy really like..REALLY true cracked the hell out of me :talking about this :

    And you start thinking

    of the pliers,

    or a string tied to a doorknob,

    or a hammer.

    well it just does get unbearable, you embarrass me. This is the lastttttttt time I skip a dentist's appointment.

    I promise you, my tooth will not ache anymore, I will not give you the pleasure to torture me, you wise big man.

    I LOVE IT, people should nominate this, it's too good not to be on the front page.

  • 5 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Lol, loved the ending, it shows the desperation of how much you need the pain to stop.

    i can understand this feeling as have siffered it and there is nothing like it, the way I sometimes said it was like my tooth was having a migrane while throwing a tantrum and doing jumping jacks!!

    Excellent poem and I hope your toothache ends before you reach for that hammer!

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    LOL; my jaw ached me for 2 days... now I still have some soreness in my mouth.. God, teeth hurt :/

    I really feel the need to crack my jaw with a hammer!!!!!!!!!!!111

  • 5 years ago

    by Rania Moallem


  • 5 years ago

    by Rusheena

    Your imagery is spot on! My gums were throbbing just reading it. 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Hellon

    I was trying to avoid this poem but..being the curious person that I am I just had to visit! My prime fear (apart from snakes as you know) is the dentist! I never used to be like this but now...I went recently..not that I was in pain but one of my caps broke..right at the front of my mouth I went and...$7,000 later I have my nice smile match the broken tooth up with the other caps which were stained with too much coffee and Cigs would have cost $2,200 so I decided to get them all replaced....just could imagine myself taking teeth out to put on the night stand!

    But...nightmares?....I walked round the bloke a few times each visit before I could open the door!

    • 5 years ago

      by Larry Chamberlin

      Hah! I can picture that: one beauty of a pearly white surrounded by real world coffee stained.

  • 5 years ago

    by Darren

    This is great Larry, I know exactly how you feel and I have also considered pliers and the like.

    The best thing about this is when you read it my mouth actually started to throb!!!

    There is real pain in this.

  • 5 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Still waiting for the headache challenge poem! yap 2nd is week over Mr!

  • 5 years ago

    by zombiepikachu

    I'm so excited to read this!c: I wrote a short, flash fiction story over this concept. This is beautiful. I really understand how this feels, and I'm so glad. I've got a lotta respect for you, after reading this. C: