Hahahah God Larry....I was so happy that I haven't read the post in the club before I slept that night, because when I read it along with zahra's and Josh's posts... I wondered whether to cry or laugh.
you should start thinking of acting in SAW movie...haha seriously....this is too descriptive you know, and I think it really does need a very stable head :P to come up with that imagination, not everyone can describe something with that quality of details.
It may seem funny, and well weird, but very deep!
Then comes your evil...mind:
n the quiet,
lying in bed,
LIKE seriously ? ya thanks I did not know that -_- lol, beautiful Larry, and so factual.
this isn't just a verb in gerund form, no. It is a very smart way to describe the situation, because it does really throb! Tick..tack...oh God... :(
You can feel the sensitive
on the nerve
yes press painfully on the nerve, lmao..you are so evil.
with each pulse
in red agony
red agony!!!this was very well thought of, you changed disgusting stuff into metaphors. Aint that just magical ?
And actually the fact that your last lines are so true, realy really like..REALLY true cracked the hell out of me :talking about this :
And you start thinking
of the pliers,
or a string tied to a doorknob,
or a hammer.
well it just does get unbearable, you embarrass me. This is the lastttttttt time I skip a dentist's appointment.
I promise you, my tooth will not ache anymore, I will not give you the pleasure to torture me, you wise big man.
I LOVE IT, people should nominate this, it's too good not to be on the front page.
Your imagery is spot on! My gums were throbbing just reading it. 5/5
5 years ago
I was trying to avoid this poem but..being the curious person that I am I just had to visit! My prime fear (apart from snakes as you know) is the dentist! I never used to be like this but now...I went recently..not that I was in pain but one of my caps broke..right at the front of my mouth so..off I went and...$7,000 later I have my nice smile back...to match the broken tooth up with the other caps which were stained with too much coffee and Cigs would have cost $2,200 so I decided to get them all replaced....just could imagine myself taking teeth out to put on the night stand!
But...nightmares?....I walked round the bloke a few times each visit before I could open the door!
I'm so excited to read this!c: I wrote a short, flash fiction story over this concept. This is beautiful. I really understand how this feels, and I'm so glad. I've got a lotta respect for you, after reading this. C: