The title cought my attention, and I wanted to read this poem. It is BRILLIANT, the idea is amazing. I love everything about it. Awesome job:)

Ouch. This poem needs a dentist not a comment, Larry. Which makes me wonder, have you seen one lately?

Hahahah God Larry....I was so happy that I haven't read the post in the club before I slept that night, because when I read it along with zahra's and Josh's posts... I wondered whether to cry or laugh.

you should start thinking of acting in SAW movie...haha seriously....this is too descriptive you know, and I think it really does need a very stable head :P to come up with that imagination, not everyone can describe something with that quality of details.
It may seem funny, and well weird, but very deep!

Then comes your evil...mind:

n the quiet,
lying in bed,
no distractions,

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LIKE seriously ? ya thanks I did not know that -_- lol, beautiful Larry, and so factual.

throbbing
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this isn't just a verb in gerund form, no. It is a very smart way to describe the situation, because it does really throb! Tick..tack...oh God... :(

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You can feel the sensitive
gum tissue

press painfully

on the nerve

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yes press painfully on the nerve, lmao..you are so evil.

with each pulse

in red agony
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red agony!!!this was very well thought of, you changed disgusting stuff into metaphors. Aint that just magical ?

And actually the fact that your last lines are so true, realy really like..REALLY true cracked the hell out of me :talking about this :

And you start thinking

of the pliers,

or a string tied to a doorknob,

or a hammer.

^^
well it just does get unbearable, you embarrass me. This is the lastttttttt time I skip a dentist's appointment.

I promise you, my tooth will not ache anymore, I will not give you the pleasure to torture me, you wise big man.

I LOVE IT, people should nominate this, it's too good not to be on the front page.

Lol, loved the ending, it shows the desperation of how much you need the pain to stop.

i can understand this feeling as have siffered it and there is nothing like it, the way I sometimes said it was like my tooth was having a migrane while throwing a tantrum and doing jumping jacks!!

Excellent poem and I hope your toothache ends before you reach for that hammer!

LOL; my jaw ached me for 2 days... now I still have some soreness in my mouth.. God, teeth hurt :/

I really feel the need to crack my jaw with a hammer!!!!!!!!!!!111

Oh..Easy boy..lol

Your imagery is spot on! My gums were throbbing just reading it. 5/5

I was trying to avoid this poem but..being the curious person that I am I just had to visit! My prime fear (apart from snakes as you know) is the dentist! I never used to be like this but now...I went recently..not that I was in pain but one of my caps broke..right at the front of my mouth so..off I went and...$7,000 later I have my nice smile back...to match the broken tooth up with the other caps which were stained with too much coffee and Cigs would have cost $2,200 so I decided to get them all replaced....just could imagine myself taking teeth out to put on the night stand!

But...nightmares?....I walked round the bloke a few times each visit before I could open the door!

This is great Larry, I know exactly how you feel and I have also considered pliers and the like.

The best thing about this is when you read it my mouth actually started to throb!!!

There is real pain in this.

Still waiting for the headache challenge poem! yap 2nd is week over Mr!

I'm so excited to read this!c: I wrote a short, flash fiction story over this concept. This is beautiful. I really understand how this feels, and I'm so glad. I've got a lotta respect for you, after reading this. C: