Great message from you to the rich man asking help for the community. This is different from your previous poems and I strongly recommend it, cause all communities are in need of such thoughts to enhance the compassionate hands giving help. By such powerful messages the world will be rectified. Thank you for throwing the lights on these important points.
This is such a touching poem, it holds so much deep situations and society issues that we face daily and see everywhere in the world and I loved your idea here in how to express this using 2 lines per each situation. This was done so well and made it unique. It flowed well because of the rhyme which made the message sink in stronger too.
This is a wonderful message, Alisha. There is chaos among the world, all kinds of destruction...along with homeless and starving people. Also with the problems with schools needed funded, as well as hospitals... You captured everything in this one poem. But yet... there are so many rich people throughout the world that look down upon us "little people" and won't pay a cent to help their country. Those people... I pity. They may have all the money in the world, however that is all they will have...and one day they will have to answer for that. Money doesn't equal happiness in my book.
I can't express how much of a great message this is... but now... I'm off to read part two! :D
5 years ago
Alisha, this indeed holds a wonderful message. I'm not as good a critique/poet like you so all I could offer is my praise. The title caught my eye because I found it intriguing and different. Rich people most often have pockets filled with riches and it is peculiar to think of one with empty pockets. Very clever.