Comments : Abortion

  • 6 years ago

    by Amreen

    Oh so emotional... I love the theme... It depict so much...your words has the power to play with the reader's mind... I loved the flow:)

  • 6 years ago

    by TSI25

    Same topic as before, but this one is written in a much, much more approachable way. im not sure that i can convey why exactly, but it seems to be more generally rational while still conveying a similar message. maybe its that its easier to sort of... comprehend the perspective (not that i claim to fully understand what you are going through). over all i like this one much better.

  • 6 years ago

    by LostWords

    I very much hope that you as 15 years old are not going through this, but if you are I am so sorry that you are being tortured from this choice.

    Some critiques, to make it easier to read make sure you capitalize certain words and use correct punctuation. For example: I've, I'll.
    Also the word "then" is used in your case as "than"

    Otherwise, this is a heart wrenching poem. I love how you say, "I can't wait for the day that you'll be born" yet, you will never experience that. Really cuts the reader. Knowing that day will never come...I couldn't even imagine that torture. 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Formidable Muse

    This is so sad, abortion is a terrible thing. If you had to go through this I'm really sorry ):
    The poem is lovely though.

  • 5 years ago

    by Love Fallacy

    Good write. This is very emotional and serious all together. I can't imagine having to make this choice, and after reading this i would never want to.

  • 5 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poen delivered( no pun intended) the sadness and depression shared makes these words somewhat powerful 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Autuumnbree

    First I would like to commend you for touching on a meaningful subject.

    I really hope that you personally haven't had to experience the pain of an abortion or those feelings of what might been due to having abortions. I know I comment before and stated that I am against abortions but in some circumstances such rape or incest I understand but still don't like the thought of a innocent child being murder.

    Thought provoking write, I also agree with the other comments here this poem is written better.

  • 5 years ago

    by Cheyenne

    Thanks everybody for the comments.
    No this poem isn't about me, I personally didn't go through it but someone close to me did and seeing the affect it had on them I created this poem.