I think you wrote this perfectly, I loved every word, especially

"Looking into my eyes with happiness
With your smile radiating your feelings"
and
"As under the stars we peacefully lay

Holding me close, never letting me go
Whispering to each other sweet nothings
You trying to show me you love me so
Stealing my heart; the best of beginnings" those seven lines spoke to me, BEAUTIFUL! 100/100