OMG Chelsey, this was captivating and oh so good, it was like I was watching a love affair, a scene in a movie, it was just so powerful,
but it was sad as well, and sometimes dreams show us what we really want, sometimes they are better than what we have, or to us anyway.
We just wrote down this disorder in psych class yesterday!!! I think in regards to major depressive disorder or something around that but I was so absorbed in this moment you created. I loved the understanding of just gazing into each other's eyes, and wanting that to last forever. I love how you wrote that ending....that now finding that inspiration in the silence is much better for you than living life without a trace of it. You had such purpose in your voice but like Tara said I can see the hint of sadness too, that maybe this is the only way of living on is by resting more often so you don't have to go back. Great write!!
I love this one Chels Chels, I often wake up during the night with a poem bursting to get out of my head and right from your opening this is what I was feeling.
I like how you open with the statements everyone else seems to make so easy but then it makes us wonder if they have ever been through the situation in order for them to be able to think or believe what they say. There are so many of these examples! I think the first one you mention, the dreams, everyone can relate to the most because we have all felt closer to someone in our dreams and it makes you want to remain asleep so we can stay with them longer.
There we were...where, I do not know, but the room was
dark, the table cloth was beige, the candle sticks white,
our napkins red, and your eyes so abundantly
captivating, it made my cheeks turn a soft pink.
- what i really liked about this part was how you described everything so clearly as if you could remember it like it was seconds ago but then exactly where you cant remember which for me indicates exactly where in the relationship you were.
Words filled our heads, but silence filled the air
- this was such a powerful line because although you have previously described the scene , here you are setting and describing the mood and the atosphere in that scene! This worked really well for me and helped me get an exact feel of what you are writing about.
Your ending is strong and brings the poem to the final point that you started with - dreams can be so much better and more comforting than what reality can be.
Enjoyed this, and related to it well. Thanks, good work xx
Do you have any idea how many times I woke up to pen my dreams into poems only to never forget the feeling I had when I was dreaming? I live through my dream world, dreams affect my personality and who I am more than anything would. I have had a lot of dreams that moved me the same way your poem did, it reminded me of the emotions I had when I woke up to them.
I am nominating this one Monday morning for sure.
And thank you for taking me back through memory lane <3