Comments : Cloudless Blur

  • 4 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Beautiful poetry, Yakori, you always amaze me with how you portray your feelings. I know very well what you are trying to convey here, how life can catch you off guard and how you sometimes have to struggle to come back to your normal self again.

    "Relaxing my foggy mind on sofa,
    I cruised in the garden of optimism"

    "I sat abruptly to a blasting sound,
    ripping my body as thunder galloped."

    ^^

    A very sharp contrast here, you managed to get the emotions across splendidly here!

    Very well done!

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 4 years ago

    by Amreen

    Sister, you are awesome! This is a thought and the way you portrayed it shows your elegance and it has the touch of your metaphors!!

    Amazingly amazing!

    Nominated:)

  • 4 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    You really have talent and so far I have not found anything that I feel needs work I am humbled by your free flow skill

    This is awesome!

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This is a wonderful piece of writing. A lovely, melodic flow to this - excellent.