Comments : Secret

  • 5 years ago

    by xXxMidnight SoulxXx

    "don't" on the last stanza first sentence should be "doesn't" in my opinion and the flow was great and i really love this cute and adorable poem! 5/5

    Queen Ashlin

  • 5 years ago

    by TSI25

    I agree with "xXx Hear My Voice In Your Mind A", "don't" should probably be "doesnt"

    the poem was very sweet, and im sure anthony would/will be very flattered to read it. i was a little tripped up by the organic rhyme scheme, and the slant rhymes, but over all the flow was very good, and it was very succinct, a quality i can respect in a poem.

  • 5 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    This is cute, however I have a few suggestions. I see in stanza one and three you have a rhyme scheme with "know" and "so" in stanza one and "stay" and "delay" in stanza three. So, my suggestion is to re-word a couple lines in stanzas two and four so it has a consistence rhyme scheme.

    "Your my only friend,"

    ^ Your should be You're

    and I agree with the other two comments that don't should be changed to doesn't in the fourth stanza.

    I'm assuming the secret is that you love him. He is still just a friend but you have deeper feelings for him. In my opinion, go for it...confess to him and see how it plays out. You will never know if you don't ever try. :) Good luck!

    Sweet poem, I'm sure if you ever let him read it he will love it!

  • 5 years ago

    by Vic Johns

    Plenty of emotion in this wee number!

  • 5 years ago

    by Daylight Lucidity

    Really sweet, I loved it

  • 5 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I would be flattered if I were Antony. I am impressed

  • 5 years ago

    by Tina

    'Your my only friend, with love on delay' ..... very touching. :)

  • 4 years ago

    by WintersAngel

    Lot of emotion in this piece. And the flow is awesome. Great job, yet again :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Autumn Leaves

    Nice poem, its very hard holding feelings in for an individual and having to spend time with them. Love is such a complicated thing, we all wish that love was as simple as street lights. The red light would tell you when to stop and the green light would tell you when you should pursue.

    Good write...AL

  • 4 years ago

    by Amreen

    Lovely... Memories are precious and its difficult to let a person go who is the reason behind them. Your words seem to express a want to be good friends again.

    Great Piece:)

    Keep writing:))