His eyes are captivating and steadily pull
His lips are ever so tempting and when he
speaks I am at his mercy.
His kiss decimates my will I know he can
feel my needs within.
His scent is like a rare aphrodisiac that is
hard to find.
His hands of velvet bring forth a hidden
He is addictive like a drug that clouds my
vision and messes with the mind.
When lay there skin to skin his soft whispers
in the dark entice erotic fantasies from the
depths of my imagination.
Never have I acted like this unable to walk away,
unable to resist.
He has banished my strength and I have lost all
voice of reason.
The chance of a kiss or caress of his hands has
me imprisoned not wanting to escape.
I just wanr to let all the colors of the world pass
through our bodies like strings of fire.
He is provocative and there are no limits to the
feelings he can create.
He dominates my soul and makes me feel like
there is liquid fire coursing through my veins.
Tempting me, bewitching me, and clouding my
And throughout the day I secretly long for the moment
I can scream out his name.
I am a captive succumbing to pure sensual
He has seduced me and awakened a ravenous
hunger inside my body.
Lust and want burn in my eyes like an uncontrollable
Of he takes me wraping me up in his crimson
There is a small spelling error "I just wanr to let all the colors of the world pass" should be 'want'. Aside from that, the description that you pour into this is flawless. It's vivid without being crude, gives a really strong sense of pure, raw feeling.
You describe each aspect of the lover in such a unique and imaginative way "His kiss decimates my will" which makes the poem seem all the more personal because each description is tailored exactly to him and how he makes the narrator feel.
"Never have I acted like this unable to walk away," I think this line needs some punctuation "Never have I acted like this; unable to walk away," perhaps? Or a colon would work fine as well :).
Wonderful poem, you wrap up the feelings of seduction brilliantly. 5/5 :)
Thank you so much for your kind words. I am glad that you enjoyed this piece. Thank you aso for pointing out the things that I seemed to have looked over when I was posting this. Thank also for the 5/5. :)