Comments : Across The Sea

  • 5 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Wow, this is amazing. I love it. The beginning is strong and the end is amazing. I love the word choice and its simplicity. The style is great and the flow is pretty good.

    My favorite bit:
    The way that we loved,
    And how it all fell apart,
    You disappeared the fourth of May,
    Running off with my heart.

    and even with all the personal details i find it easy to say that a lot of people can relate in some sort of way

  • 4 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    Wow, i am not sure how to even begin with this poem or.. song! You are such a talented writer! I love this ...

  • 4 years ago

    by Devon

    It flows really well. 5/5
    an enjoyable read for me. thank you :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I have to say the flow you have got here is actually quite amazing. It does have song rhythm to it. very catchy.

    The story itself was very easy to relate to, in a lost relationship. The distance was very well portrayed in your simple line of :

    I lived over here,
    You, across the sea,

    - to me, this implies a big distance.

    This would make a great love song by someone, many people will relate to it, especially when you mention the regrets and the fact that your heart can't forget. This just shows how much in love you were, and how you believed it was going to last forever.

    I really do like this. Well done.

  • 4 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    Another great piece. Its true, Love never dies and that you convey well in this piece. This is really a wonderful song, the flow was amazing, the rhyming was good and i tried singing it but my lousy voice messed it up. LOL

  • 3 years ago

    by Augastus Black

    I really don't know how to appreciate this song. Very much true with a very decent imagination. I believe it will great to read this song, while if we are near the sea, feeling the gentle breeze and reading this song. This poem is very very fantastic. Actually I had also thought very earlier before reading this write to write a poem very similar to this. Great work done be great lass. 5 out of 5 stars.