Nice and fresh... I liked it. It's not as disgusting as I thought it would be and it's funny. The comparision to animals I found a bit offensive at first but then felt it quite cool and imagined if people would really croak with frogs how it'd be... the comparision also helps in the advice on the moral side. I remember I had a teacher who said chewing gum made us look like grasing cows and it worked because no one wanted to look like a grasing cow. Great write!
5 years ago
by Tara Kay
Hahaha, this is right up my street Andrea, and made me smile...
The title made me think of a children's joke book, so that drew me in, but not only was it amusing and humorous, it was also very well penned (not that I expect anything less), but the rhymes were not forced, if somewhat cliche, but still it worked and the flow was pretty smooth throughout.