Comments : An Eclipsed Life

  • 4 years ago

    by L

    This poem reminded me of people who just speak with the intuition of ridiculing for the sake of hurting. The beginning stanza was a great start. Specially the "lashing tongues," it hits one with a concrete yet abstract image. I also like the use of "Hyenas" good metaphor fitted for the poem. I associate the Hyenas like with bullies.

    I think by Eclipsed life.. the way I interpret it is that those lashing tongues can make ones life obscure and pretty much they can mark our life forever.

    This poem is sad and it has more depth. What I loved the most what the journey I was taken into with a few words. Specially in this stanza

    "A striving mare
    runs wild to escape
    to find freedom
    from ridicules embrace,

    But

    Callous bullets
    pierce the soul,"

    Well done

  • 4 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    You have this amazing gift of saying so much with such few words...love the way you create the picture with valuable message & yet without saying anything at all.

    Great write friends & Congrats on your well deserved win :)

    all the best & take care

  • 4 years ago

    by Henry

    Poignant wording.

  • 4 years ago

    by Robert

    All I can say is that I thought this poem was amazing.

    Wonderful read, 5/5