I loved the first stanza you wrote! Oh my gosh. We all have to ask why but I loved how you said it embraces you. You seem to say it's like your friend. But I guess we ask why in a negative term more so tihan positive. Illoved what you say in the second stanza too. It seems like you are saying there that you don't know whether to keep going or just go back to what you know and are comfortable with. Of course that decision is always up to you. I liked the wine too. You can always drown your troubles in alcohol but the thing to ask is does it really make you feel better or why do you drink in the first place? The ending seems to be dark and a lil sad. I think we all have to ask why are we here and that's something only we can figure out. Haha. Anyway lovely write as always! !
Hannah...this was so creative. Yes we all ask why at times and in txt mess. it gets cut to Y so you tend to really look at this letter in a different light.
All of the thing you refer to in your poem do, in fact relate to Y, the fork in the road...the wine glass also looks Y shaped and...definitely the wish bone does. To me...this poem is build so wonderfully around one letter...like I said it's so very creative and I do like your turn around at the end...it was very flippant and totally unexpected...the Y turning on you lol!
One little thing I'd like to question and...I've seen many poet on here using the word snicker...snicker is a chocolate bar over here so it always makes me stumble...I would have used snigger but...maybe that's no longer politically correct?
Yeah, Snickers is a candy bar here as well. I think I will change it to snigger now that you mention it! It would most definitely fit better due to the "taunting" part instead of just a light snicker of giggles.
Dang Hannah....I thought this poem had a high point in the beginning and mellowed out in the Middle. Then the end you just killed it. Very crafty...and almost sad..reminds me of something innocent that shouldn't be questioned but is..
A letter that
only words, but
wraps its arms
around your emotions
and simply asks,
-I love the title, and the idea you have used the letter for the word why. Very creative and unique and I would imagine would be hard to pull off, I wasn't sure if this would work in poetry but you definitely nailed it. Well done. You grab the readers attention right away.
It's that fork in
the road that
leaves you puzzled
and unsure if you
should just turn
around and go back
home where you can
safely snuggle against
- The fork in the road here is so vivid, I imagine myself to be at this junction where I do not know where to turn and what road to choose. I guess then I would go back to the question why, why I ended up here and why I do not know an answer for the way out. So short, but yet it holds so much. I am sure we can all relate to this stanza.
And it's the
empty wine glass
that you continuously
rim with your finger,
pondering if you should
sip one more glass or
down the whole damn
- I know this is a serious tone in the poem, but this made me smile a bit also. I could really imagine coming home after the very worst day and having strong emotions running in your mind, and when your finger rims that glass, it is almost tempting yourself with another, and then you tell yourself why not, why not just keep going because it will drown it out. Brilliant imagery.
The wishbone that donates
hope and ultimately shifts into
an indian giver by crushing
your hallucination of
- I think Indian should have a capital I?
- I never thought of a wishbone to be in the shape of a y , that is really interested and thank you for making me realise that. Your wording here of hallucination of happiness is very good. It also shows the sadness within this poem that you feel happiness is a trick, and will never be real,
I continue to interrogate
this simple letter,
pleading for an answer...
only for it to snigger
and ask me the same
question in return.
- very clever ending, I didn't think you could add in more creativity to this piece with the idea you already have, but you did in the end here.
I guess it is true, I can imagine saying Why, and it replying with Why Not.
Fantastic poem Hannah, flowed so well and had a really good message in it. Well done on the win. Well deserved.
Wow... this was such an unusual source of inspiration. The title caught my eye and the descriptions were so perfect. I love how you were able to personify a letter and completely bring it to life. There is so much emotion here for it being a piece that really feels simply random. Its always the pieces no one expects or sees coming that blow so mqny out of the water and leave us all wishing that we could do what has just been done. There is a massive show of skill and personality in this piece. I love it.
4 years ago
Clever! It drives me nuts when people just write "Y" and I let go of that pet peeve to appreciate the art of your poem here. I thought this piece was really interesting, clever and unique. It has a few cliches (fork in the road for example), but it has a lot of new ideas rolled into it. I love the part about the wishbone donating hope - great use of 'donate' there. This poem is another poem highlighted this week that is very relatable - it's just one of those things we all do - ask why? Why do things happen? Sometimes it does seem like life is playing a sick joke and comes back with slaps in the face.. but I love that there is also a slight sense of hope in this poem. This is really awesome
This is such a well written poem as well as very creative. I love it how you were able to create such meaningful words out of a simple letter, and although the letter Y represents different things each time, all of the stanzas and their ideas seem to be incredibly well connected. It takes an incredible skill to be able to come up with a poem like this, extremely well done, it's really a pleasure to have the chance to read such poems. I just adore the imagery and visuals that Hannah creates throughout this and this was really a breath of fresh air to read. I really enjoyed this and thought that it was incredibly unique and well written.