Comments : Y

  • 3 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    I loved the first stanza you wrote! Oh my gosh. We all have to ask why but I loved how you said it embraces you. You seem to say it's like your friend. But I guess we ask why in a negative term more so tihan positive. Illoved what you say in the second stanza too. It seems like you are saying there that you don't know whether to keep going or just go back to what you know and are comfortable with. Of course that decision is always up to you. I liked the wine too. You can always drown your troubles in alcohol but the thing to ask is does it really make you feel better or why do you drink in the first place? The ending seems to be dark and a lil sad. I think we all have to ask why are we here and that's something only we can figure out. Haha. Anyway lovely write as always! !

  • 3 years ago

    by Hellon

    Hannah...this was so creative. Yes we all ask why at times and in txt mess. it gets cut to Y so you tend to really look at this letter in a different light.

    All of the thing you refer to in your poem do, in fact relate to Y, the fork in the road...the wine glass also looks Y shaped and...definitely the wish bone does. To me...this poem is build so wonderfully around one letter...like I said it's so very creative and I do like your turn around at the end...it was very flippant and totally unexpected...the Y turning on you lol!

    One little thing I'd like to question and...I've seen many poet on here using the word snicker...snicker is a chocolate bar over here so it always makes me stumble...I would have used snigger but...maybe that's no longer politically correct?

    Anyway....another enjoyable l write from you.

    • 3 years ago

      by Hannah Lizette

      Thanks so much, Hellon! :)

      Yeah, Snickers is a candy bar here as well. I think I will change it to snigger now that you mention it! It would most definitely fit better due to the "taunting" part instead of just a light snicker of giggles.

      Thanks for the suggestion, dear!

  • 3 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I love your originality in this Hannah! I probably would have only thought about the fork in the road... but you lay another path for the reader to think about.

    There's something so poetic and inspiring about how you mentioned the wishbone. Almost as if it passes on a legacy.

    Definitely makes me think of the answers we try to solve or get around, but keep coming back in full circle to them. Great personification and thought in this poem....

    Really liked reading this, it was quite refreshing!

  • 3 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Dang Hannah....I thought this poem had a high point in the beginning and mellowed out in the Middle. Then the end you just killed it. Very crafty...and almost sad..reminds me of something innocent that shouldn't be questioned but is..

    Creative!!

  • 3 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    Yayyyy Hannah I am so glad you won. Congrats!!!!

  • 3 years ago

    by Meme

    Well deserved too :)

  • 3 years ago

    by PorcelainMoon

    Wow, I often read poems and glaze over the words with my eyes thinking about other things (comes naturally when you read 200+ a day) Not this one i assure you. 5/5

    -Dean

  • 3 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    A letter that
    illustrates not
    only words, but
    wraps its arms
    around your emotions
    and simply asks,
    ?

    -I love the title, and the idea you have used the letter for the word why. Very creative and unique and I would imagine would be hard to pull off, I wasn't sure if this would work in poetry but you definitely nailed it. Well done. You grab the readers attention right away.

    It's that fork in
    the road that
    leaves you puzzled
    and unsure if you
    should just turn
    around and go back
    home where you can
    safely snuggle against
    rueful thoughts.

    - The fork in the road here is so vivid, I imagine myself to be at this junction where I do not know where to turn and what road to choose. I guess then I would go back to the question why, why I ended up here and why I do not know an answer for the way out. So short, but yet it holds so much. I am sure we can all relate to this stanza.

    And it's the
    empty wine glass
    that you continuously
    rim with your finger,
    pondering if you should
    sip one more glass or
    down the whole damn
    bottle.

    - I know this is a serious tone in the poem, but this made me smile a bit also. I could really imagine coming home after the very worst day and having strong emotions running in your mind, and when your finger rims that glass, it is almost tempting yourself with another, and then you tell yourself why not, why not just keep going because it will drown it out. Brilliant imagery.

    The wishbone that donates
    hope and ultimately shifts into
    an indian giver by crushing
    your hallucination of
    happiness.

    - I think Indian should have a capital I?
    - I never thought of a wishbone to be in the shape of a y , that is really interested and thank you for making me realise that. Your wording here of hallucination of happiness is very good. It also shows the sadness within this poem that you feel happiness is a trick, and will never be real,

    I continue to interrogate
    this simple letter,
    pleading for an answer...

    only for it to snigger
    and ask me the same
    question in return.

    - very clever ending, I didn't think you could add in more creativity to this piece with the idea you already have, but you did in the end here.
    I guess it is true, I can imagine saying Why, and it replying with Why Not.

    Fantastic poem Hannah, flowed so well and had a really good message in it. Well done on the win. Well deserved.

  • 3 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Wow... this was such an unusual source of inspiration. The title caught my eye and the descriptions were so perfect. I love how you were able to personify a letter and completely bring it to life. There is so much emotion here for it being a piece that really feels simply random. Its always the pieces no one expects or sees coming that blow so mqny out of the water and leave us all wishing that we could do what has just been done. There is a massive show of skill and personality in this piece. I love it.

    5/5

  • 3 years ago

    by Britt

    Judging comments:

    Clever! It drives me nuts when people just write "Y" and I let go of that pet peeve to appreciate the art of your poem here. I thought this piece was really interesting, clever and unique. It has a few cliches (fork in the road for example), but it has a lot of new ideas rolled into it. I love the part about the wishbone donating hope - great use of 'donate' there. This poem is another poem highlighted this week that is very relatable - it's just one of those things we all do - ask why? Why do things happen? Sometimes it does seem like life is playing a sick joke and comes back with slaps in the face.. but I love that there is also a slight sense of hope in this poem. This is really awesome

  • 3 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Judging comment:

    This is such a well written poem as well as very creative. I love it how you were able to create such meaningful words out of a simple letter, and although the letter Y represents different things each time, all of the stanzas and their ideas seem to be incredibly well connected. It takes an incredible skill to be able to come up with a poem like this, extremely well done, it's really a pleasure to have the chance to read such poems. I just adore the imagery and visuals that Hannah creates throughout this and this was really a breath of fresh air to read. I really enjoyed this and thought that it was incredibly unique and well written.

  • 3 years ago

    by Midnight Sky

    Love this felt every word best poem yet

  • 3 years ago

    by LittleMsPink

    I love this one

  • 3 years ago

    by Fear2love

    I can feel the passion in this poem. And the care you put into this. I enjoy reading this work of art.