Comments : Do You Feel My Aches?

  • 3 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Nice Poem

    Emptiness this is very meaning full of word for me.

    My Love makes me empty.
    Love fill me with tears.
    He stole my smile.
    My Hands are empty.
    Always keep finding his name.
    But..............
    I get only empty hand & life.

    I want another life but not with love,
    with my smile & Dreams.

  • 3 years ago

    by Amreen

    Beautiful! This was nicely worded and when I read your thought behind writing this, the beauty of this piece increased for me. Well done with this poem. Missed your writes!

    Keep writing:)

  • 3 years ago

    by Mohan

    It's really amazing you written this poem by using your titles only..

  • 3 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Great job

  • 3 years ago

    by Henry

    A wonderful creative writing. A superb poem written by you.

  • 3 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Wonderful Meena!!!

  • 3 years ago

    by DarkLight

    I love your way of thinking...it makes ua poems sweet to read.

  • 3 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Very creative idea. I like what you have done with the other titles, and until you pointed that out with your added note at the end, I wouldn't have guessed that at all.

    I like how the poem seems to be about love, but also the emotion that becomes conflicted in love. The good and the bad. The emptiness V sadness is powerful, and relevant to love. We often feel alone, and empty, so we become trapped inside a love that isn't very real, but we feel it is better than nothing, only to end up hurting more.

    The opening stanza is strong because you portrayed the devotion you have to this other person by saying you only live for them, you only survive because of their love, and this is what gets you through the days.

    I like the fearless love. I think the ideal love is fearless, but it never is so. Fearless love would imply that the person loves you no matter what and does not fear anything in the future about you, about how you change, about your flaws, about any barriers you put up. If they are fearless, and you put up walls to protect yourself, this person would be fearless in breaking them down to get to you. I like this idea.

    Another good write