Comments : Don't make me beg

  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Ahh, I knew that quote was from a new poem! I even googled it thinking it was song lyrics lol.

    What a beautiful love poem. I love the idea of someone warming your bones. Reminds me that even if it's not winter this person will be by your side and in your heart so you are never alone.

    I also like how you admitted that you can't find any more analogies, and how relatable is that? That sometimes we can't name that feeling or can't put definitions to some words. But that "rally of my voice" may mean you just want to be understood. To not have the plea and have words be needed. That shared tenderness will be enough. That person knowing your heart and reaching out in the moment.

    Lovely as usual :]

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This is a very beautiful poem chelsey. First I must say the incorporation of nature works well here for me. Not that you compate nature to beauty, you went deeper than that. You did a great job using nature to to look for love so to speak. Winter is a nice touch to feel sadness and there is a sad tone throughout. I can see this piece as a lost love or even searching for love. I could be wrong but it seems like you are tired of looking for this person and all you want them to do is hear how you really feel. Overall this is nice and you did well to say everything you wanted to. The wording is great in all the right spots. No errors at all :). Well done