This poem is so very beautiful and stunning. :) the titleis one of the best iI've ever seen and fits the poem perfectly in my opinion. For me this poem is unique because in each of the new lines there is a new "character" presented. First two lines have a helicopter. Not so much a character but the object I suppose. The second two lines hold the policeman who is represented as being stern and tough. The next have the teacher who cannot show how scared they are so I loved how you put the gun in. The ending is great I feel too. The student you represent as a soft and scared. The poem has a whole I feel is about the violence or shootings in the school or world we have now. Overall this poem is simple but each line holds such powerful wording. Change nothing. Very impressed with this!
You kept it simple which I think is important when you are talking about an important issue such as this.
I feel the first half of this piece focuses on the 'new' way teachers and pupils have to adjust and the second half tells how everyone still yearns for the old way but, sadly, concede that it's now in the past.
Congrats on getting it published and...welcome back...you have been missed :)
This piece is so short and concise and so accurately portrays the emotion of disturbance through really subtle, but jarring descriptions. "Teacher keeps a loaded gun inside her pencil drawer"... When I first read through this, I genuinely thought it would say apple, but no, a gun. And the last line, too. Way to smash everyone's favorite childhood singalong into bits. In a good way, of course. :) The fact that you pulled off this simplicity and clever wordplay while keeping a rhyme scheme astounds me. Great job!