Comments : The Purple Sponge

  • 3 years ago

    by Lemon

    I love your use of the prompt here! It is an unusual and interesting one :). I was expecting you to drop a mention of a purple sponge into a poem about something else but you actually made the sponge the focus of the poem. I like your continuation of the metaphor in "the world would be watered with words wrung from grandeur dreams." :). The ideas you've picked up on here are interesting- because poetry of course is universal, a lot of people enjoy it and it's often used as a coping mechanism, but what if it was only for the rich?

    I think a small change you could make would be to change "than" to "then"; "Than, thoughts would remain captive". I also think you could leave a space before "... And true happiness would never be invented." to give it more impact and leave a greater pause with the ellipsis. But apart from that it's a very good poem, with the rhetorical musings on what if poetry WERE associated with the rich and the effect that would leave.

    Lovely, dear, it's sad there was never any voting :(

  • 3 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    An interesting thought! Relating poetry to a purple sponge, how much can it soak and when squeezed it just lets it out..I like this.

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This really is a highly imaginative and well written piece that I enjoyed immensely. "And true happiness would never be invented"
    ^^^^
    Great ending!
    All the very best
    Ben

  • 2 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    Unusual poem subject, and you wrote it well.
    Some great expressions there you use.
    Love the line - 'Then, thoughts would remain captive
    within the beauty of material pleasures..'
    Beautiful.

    Peter.. remember the Ravens! lol!