Comments : While we rest in peace

  • 3 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I can see you have put in lots of thoughts as well as emotions in this write. As I was reading images of titanic, Romeo and Juliet kept playing in my mind. I could also see that each stanza was written with his and her views. Very well penned with all the yearning and love afloat.

    Just one thing though. This line:

    I counted every second of the past threw decades

    ^^I think you meant three instead threw.
    Also instead of writing of the past three decades, it will sound better for the past 3 decades.

    Liked the read..keep penning.

    • 3 years ago

      by Mihir Deshmukh

      Thank you and I'll change the three thing right away

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    I like this because it's long but keeps it's flow and also rhythm. The emotions, sadness, love and yearning are all there.

    Em