Comments : Unending

  • 3 years ago

    by ChrisT

    This is a great write. I don't often say that on this site, but I honestly was hooked on this poem and read it through a few times. It had a great rhythm that was catchy and a sadness that lingers after you're finished.

    • 3 years ago

      by Court

      Thank you very much. :)

  • 3 years ago

    by Masked metaphor

    I love the way you structured this poem, the two line stanza's really make the reader want to read more as it is easy to follow and I find that you have followed a really smooth rhyming flow within the piece which is exceptional!

    I like how you used similar antonyms in the first line of the first two stanza's ie: loving and caring then wanted and needed - it is a great technique of prolonging and maintaining the flow.

    Reading this poem over and over, I like the way it sounds it takes me into my own thoughts in a way - scattered and continuous, broken yet making sense - like you have taken these words straight from the heart and etched them right into the core of this piece.

    Overall I love the underlying message woven - such a deep melancholy ebbed really well within your amazing word choice and the structure truly makes this piece a masterpiece as it suits it well!

    Great write Court
    thankyou for sharing such talent

    5/5

    • 3 years ago

      by Court

      Thanks for the awesome critique again. :)