Comments : You Never Loved Me

  • 3 years ago

    by cassie hughes

    Such a sad piece filled with emotion.
    I can really feel the pain coming through. I love the way you lead the reader through the story from beginning to end, with a very gentle hand, describing the changes in the relationship with subtlety and perception. Making it so real, as often change comes so gradually we don't notice until it has overwhelmed us, neatly summed up in stanza 6 here I think. We often try to hide what is really going on not only to the outside world but to ourselves as well.
    Although a sad piece the final two stanzas allow a glimmer of hope to come through. In these you show the final realisation that there was never a chance for you with this person and in that acceptance will eventually be able to move on.
    An excellent write. :)

  • 3 years ago

    by The Fairy Mary Poppins

    I loved this poem it really is beautiful, sad but still beautiful. I have some suggestions though if you don't mind, put commas after every stanza it lets the poet stop for a breathe and begin again reading because you need to take a breathe in a poem there was no grammar mistakes besides that and I dearly loved the emotions in this piece my favorite stanza was this:

    "You stood before the minister
    And spoke your wedding vow
    But all those wide-eyed promises
    Mean nothing to you now"

    people do lie but a wedding vow shouldn't ever be one of them if you aren't ready for marriage no matter what don't get married AT ALL just saying nice poem by the way I hope you heal one day 5/5

    -Mori