When I first wrote it GB. I felt it lack the beauty, of which I'm enamored and strive to write with, but because it spoke truth and said something of consequence. I felt I need it to keep it and give it life. It might lack the classic beauty, I usually strive for, but it has a message some need to here.
Best sonnet I read in here. You nailed the meaning behind. It is full of power in expressing what love should be like.
" Love should be, a mutually shared thing." so true, it cant be love when the other side is not on the same page. It should be nurtured by two for it to become real; for it to survive.