Comments : Candy heart cloaked in grey

  • 3 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This poem has such good potential, the meaning and wording is great, but I would advise changing the layout, and fixing the punctuation errors for your readers to make sense of the poem better.

    • 3 years ago

      by earlgreytea

      I was typing it on an insanely old phone, I could not see the painful structure until now.

  • 3 years ago

    by cassie hughes

    Wow, this is such a great piece. Full of emotion, the wording is just perfect and I love the line "Like teardrop needles in my spine." You have obviously had a chance to play with this since Saffie commented because I found it flowed beautifully.

  • 3 years ago

    by Shark Puncher

    Well written, miss. :)

    The word play is great in this one.

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    Fantastically written and wonderful imagery

    Em