Great descriptions of nature in this piece, and you are so good at really going into depth with each point you make, it is like you give us an image, or a thought, and then express it even more so we can clearly place ourselves in this situation!
I also like how you compared our love to the way nature loves, that was beautiful, and again, you gave examples so it was nice to picture and know exactly what you meant. Beautiful!
I adore your ending!! How sweet, just to be thankful of everything that has been handed your way, even the unpleasant things too. The imagery at the end is just so captivating and relaxing, just so fairy-tale like! The night sky was peaceful and I could feel the atmosphere just calm and quiet as the night grants your dreams.
I also love the creativity of your title, and using the different language, it gives the poem a nice unique spin to it, and works amazing for the title because if we want to know what it means we have to come and find out!
This write is beautiful!!
2 years ago
by Ben Pickard
Really, genuinely brilliant again, Crystal. The imagery you evoke really does strike as effortless. I could pick any line practically but the whole of the second stanza does it for me. 6 out of 5!