A wonderfully previously penned Haibun. I do not recall reading this before, but that matters not as I have enjoyed it now. I enjoyed the alliteration through out and the way you weave words so they create not only imagery, but fragrance and bitter sweet emotion.
I could try to dissect each word and sentence and still not fully capture the overall message. I guess the message gained will be different depending on personal opinions and how a reader feels that day? I felt after reading this that nature is mother to all, but not without fragility. She should be respected and supported by those that appreciate her for all she endows on this world.
2 years ago
by Ben Pickard
To be honest, Hellon, how this wasn't in the top 3 this week is completely beyond me. This was a stunning piece of poetry that fully deserved to win.
Thank you all for your lovely comments. Luce, good catch on the period which should have been a comma. With regards to your question about a period at the end of a haiku well, I'm not really sure. I just try to avoid punctuation if I can when writing short forms. I think the haibun could be different I guess, I was trying to take the reader through each stage of this tree, which is in my garden, and I actually did observe it for a year. I was trying to portray camera shots with words I guess....