The Naughty List effect (Senyru)

by - Mr. Darcy   Dec 19, 2015


Tommy fell asleep
wishing for a brand new bike.
He cried the next day.

michael
2015

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  • 1 year ago

    by Cindy

    Ahhh....poor Tommy....this is a sad little piece.
    Great job!
    Take care
    Cindy
    *hugs

  • 1 year ago

    by Darren

    I never got a bike either,

    mmmmm, now I know why.

    thanks for opening my eyes,

    • 1 year ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      Thanks guys. My Christmas bike was a 2nd hand racer. I felt like the cat who got the cream.

  • 1 year ago

    by yogi73

    Ha! Simply charming. a few short words summons a great deal of memory and wishful thinking of shiny new chrome and boyhood freedom...at least that is what a bike was for me as a child.

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael - a perfect senryu here about the consequences of a naughty year!
    All the very best,
    Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Hi Michael,

    In these days of severe crisis, lots of children will be crying there eyeballs out after Santa has paid a visit, most especially when they assume they must have been 'bad' to not see their wish granted.
    For parents Christmas is a difficult time, when means are few and wishes of their off spring are big. ( and lots of peer pressure on them as well!)

    Well done, much more to this poem than meets the eye.

    (((hugs))) xx

    • 1 year ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      You are so right Christmas time is too expensive and its increasingly difficult to meet expectations. Dont ypu miss the simple gifts; the homemade toys, the satsuma and nuts.
      ((Hugs)) xx