Comments : Bloodmoon II - Dawn

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I'm speechless.... Lady you can write, just in awe here

    • 2 years ago

      by Kakera

      Thank you dear. It's funny, this is actually the third poem I wrote in this series. I had finished 80% of the original second poem while struggling to stay awake. I had been awake for 48 hours, and it was 7 AM, and I wanted to finish writing the poem before finally going to bed. But the sleeping medications started working too soon, so I ended up passing out in my chair and somehow managed to close down the windows where I was writing it, losing all that I had written.

      And I even forgot almost all of the actual stanzas, the metaphors and similes, the word choices, etc. Only the core remained, so I had to rewrite it from scratch. The worst part is that I know that at least 15 lines in the original second poem were even better than anything I managed to write here, but I can't remember exactly what I wrote! It's so frustrating!

      But I am happy with the end-result of this piece anyway. But the hardest part comes now - writing an ending to it. Finishing this storyline, the story that is non-fictional truths written in fictional worlds. The meaning is very esoteric, but surprisingly honest.

      It's deeply connected with my own life, my own emotions, my own reality. But as you can tell, it's also related to the novel I'm planning, as I wrote to you in the PM. So what do I want to accomplish with the climax of these three poems? We'll see. I'm not sure yet.

      But I do know that my goal is to perfect my own style of writing, to master telling multiple stories within a single narrative, to be specific yet open to interpretations. This piece has at a minimum of three different lines of possible interpretations depending on how you choose to read it. That is something I aspire to perfect and use more and more. I hope that I have succeeded at it from the POV of you readers. :>

  • 2 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    I totally agree with Andrea. Wow.

  • 2 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Speechless too! Wow. Dark, emotional, raw write. The last few lines reminded me of the song "I will not bow" by Breaking Benjamin.

    "I saw her falling star in the depths of night,
    and she entered my soul to teach me
    the meaning behind her name, Dawn."

    - These lines too my breath away!

    You DO have a gift with words and truly expressing yourself. Love that.

    Take care :)

  • 2 years ago

    by hiraeth

    Powerful write, looking forward to the next piece in this trilogy.