I have to say that this is an epic poem. I don't really know what made you write this, but it is beautiful. The way that I interpret it, it seems like you are having an argument with yourself. However, this could also be an argument with yourself. I like how you put the times when you thought of the stanza...it is also like you are giving life to the argument.
The stanza that I really enjoyed reading was the last one. It is a strong and powerful ending. I am glad that this got nominated :) It should be.
The layout grabbed my attention first of all. I like to see something a little different from time to time. (see what I did there)
Poetry has no real boundaries, we can follow a stringent form and encase ourselves in its rules, or like Saerelune we can try something different. I like the randomness of the times, it is edgy and suggests sleeplessness. I love the overall message, the way the time jumps so quickly with the pace of the poem reflects how quickly our years move on. We should stop looking back, we shouldn't ever be looking for happiness in arithmetics. 10 points.