Comments : Wake up call

  • 2 years ago

    by Spontaneity

    I have to say that this is an epic poem. I don't really know what made you write this, but it is beautiful. The way that I interpret it, it seems like you are having an argument with yourself. However, this could also be an argument with yourself. I like how you put the times when you thought of the is also like you are giving life to the argument.

    The stanza that I really enjoyed reading was the last one. It is a strong and powerful ending. I am glad that this got nominated :) It should be.



  • 2 years ago

    by Narph

    Your mind is beautiful. I love this poem and all of its words and moments.

  • 2 years ago

    by WW

    Awesome poem! Loved reading it over a few times. Congrats on the win!

  • 2 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I really like your poem its wonderful full of really colourful phrases - colourful memos dwindling from your fridge and there is no arithmetic for happiness in particular

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    There's no sweet sixteen or forever twenty-one, there's no arithmetic for happiness.. So beautiful and true.

  • 2 years ago

    by Darren

    Judges comment

    The layout grabbed my attention first of all. I like to see something a little different from time to time. (see what I did there)
    Poetry has no real boundaries, we can follow a stringent form and encase ourselves in its rules, or like Saerelune we can try something different. I like the randomness of the times, it is edgy and suggests sleeplessness. I love the overall message, the way the time jumps so quickly with the pace of the poem reflects how quickly our years move on. We should stop looking back, we shouldn't ever be looking for happiness in arithmetics. 10 points.