Comments : Two hands

  • 1 year ago

    by Abed

    Brilliaaanttt

  • 1 year ago

    by Britt

    I don't even know how to comment on this, Yaki. There is such self awareness and maturity here..compassion and understanding. I'm super overwhelmed reading the depth in this. Simply beautiful.

  • 1 year ago

    by Britt

    Oh! I forgot to add:

    "I been at the mercy of someone else"

    Change that I to I've ;)

  • 1 year ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Gurl i love my slang language

    i'm a little hood ok

    I IS WHAT I IS.

    u know who a is

  • 1 year ago

    by Britt

    OKAY but I nominated it and judges harp on grammar, so for the record, I tried HAHAHA

    • 1 year ago

      by Yakari Gabriel

      Let them get dem wins, I got dem streets

      thug life

  • 1 year ago

    by Saerelune

    Hey love, it's been a while since I showed up my face here. Still had to post the comments I made as a judge. :P

    "The emotive response any reader would get from this piece should already be enough to win points. This fragile yet strong poem full of honesty really tug at the heartstrings and takes the reader on a journey of emotions. Of course there's more to this poem than only its emotions. I picked it for its creativity as well, there are some noteworthy lines such as "these two things are not synonyms when she can't see life without me" or the last two stanzas. My only remark would be that this poem seems even more powerful (and more meant to be) spoken out loud, yet the enjambment does not reflect this. But this does not take away from how easily this poem is understood."