Comments : Overcome

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A poem full of wisdom that anyone who feels the effects of loneliness would do well to take not of.

    SL

  • 1 year ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    It's an excellent poem, aside from the forced ending. I loved the meaning behind it, and the fact that everything you say is true-- the cure to loneliness is simply finding someone else to be a distracted sort of lonely with.

    I would suggest changing at least the last line, because it does not do the poem justice :P I would suggest "with whom to share our life.", but there are plenty of options :)

    Thanks for writing this, it shall go in my favorites for when I need reminding of the frivolous nature of loneliness.

    5/5
    IdTakeABulletForYou

    • 1 year ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Will edit :) thanks for feedback. Glad you liked it. Endin was a bit rushed. =( sleep started to set in..

  • 1 year ago

    by hiraeth

    Love that it ends on a light note.