Comments : Part 1 of a change

  • 2 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I know this, like your last poem, is far too personal for me to dissect, especially because I fear for how many people breezing through will believe that they relate. So instead I will merely respond technically, by congratulating you on your wave of emotion and how it truly reaches out to the reader and gives them an idea of just how painful your shoes are at the moment. Your style was an excellent choice, the gaps show where you are really trying to muster strength and the intact stanzas convey a sense of "this is on my mind, this is what I'm saying and you should listen" - only a lot more elegantly than that. I think your word choice is absolutely perfect and that they way you are creating your images and describing the people and things around you is incredible.

    Brilliant write. Though I'm sorry for whatever is inspiring it. (Again, I'd rather not try to dig too deeply).

    • 2 years ago

      by Poet on the Piano

      Thank you for taking the time to leave your thoughts and sweet words. It's greatly appreciated. Hope you are well.

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy


    As BlueJay states, this is a personal write and not one to be dissected. I just want you to know that I have read your words (a few times) and feel for your situation.

    Take care,

    Michael ((hugs))

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Hi as the previous comments have said this poem is not to be pulled apart because no matter how we interpret this as a reader you will be the only person to know what was inspiring you and why.
    You have a real way with words and writing them so well.

    All the best, Em