Comments : My daily reminder

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Dagmar, this is truly inspirational and very powerful.
    I truly believe friends are the family we would choose.

    Em

  • 1 year ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    I do love the concept of this poem, though the last verse is a bit congested I would say. The following is a suggestion that I would make to alleviate some of that congestion:

    Like falling leaves,
    some fly away.
    Others are like brittle branches:
    when you step on them they break.
    There is this one strong root
    holding you in place.
    That's all you need.

    I think that would make for a much smoother read; I do love your conceptualization of friendship and family-hood, and agree -- being adopted myself -- that family most definitely is not restricted to those who birth you.

    As for the underlying message, that we are strong trees that can deal with a few leaves falling off and branches falling to the wayside ... it's an important message, one I definitely needed to hear right now.

    Edit: As a side-note, this poem is the perfect size and could possibly make a wonderful tree itself. Perhaps try shaping it into one, which will help to further impress the message of us being trees unto the reader. For example:

    holding
    you in
    place.
    That's
    all you
    need.

    would make a wonderful tree trunk, and the rest of the piece could easily fill up the trees branches! Just an idea, though!

    Spectacular job,
    5/5
    IdTakeABulletForYou

  • 1 year ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Dagmar beautiful write!
    I am with em and say friends are the family we get to pick!

    Well done on a fantastic piece

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Dagmar,

    I love this sweet, sentimental write. The metaphor of a tree's leaves, branches and roots is super, but the way you have constructed their use to describe the different levels of friends, from mere acquaintances (leaves) fair weather friends/ work colleagues (branches) to long term, proven and trusted friends who are often closer than family (roots)

    Excellent poem *claps*

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    I just love this! Such true words! I had a friend that was the total opposite of me, we would always say that she gave me a look over the edge and I kept her from falling over. Well done Dagmar-hugs! Brenda

  • 1 year ago

    by stormingdance (Jessica)

    Love can be fickle, especially among family. Good thing we get to choose our friends.

  • 8 months ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    I liked this poem Dagmar. Sums up relatives exactly! A good write.

  • 4 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    So true!

    'switching from sweet loving to ice cold.'

    You are right in every word!