This is really beautiful, and quite mysterious. It has me wondering what happened to this person's knees. until the end of the poem when I realised that the knee bleeding (i think) is a metaphor for their beauty and how it is slowly dripping out of their being, even though you've been trying to help them retain the beauty via lending them your handkerchief. And by colouring your handkerchief pink it implies you were trying to stop their blood/beauty leaving via patching it up with love. However, because that person did not seek or find you, their knee kept bleeding and their beauty eventually faded to the point where you didn't feel attraction to them anymore.
A really deep metaphor for someone who is only 16! I had a look at your profile to find out your age.
The form of this poem I also really enjoyed - I'm a huge fan of free-form poetry and the layout of this poem worked perfectly with the content.
Sharodi I thought dat it was 4 ur ex best friend.......I mean seriously it's sumwat related to me??????
Any ways his work and keep penning.
1 year ago
by Ben Pickard
This really is a very moving and nostalgic piece of writing that I actually found quite chilling. It is beautifully written, especially for one so young.
Keep up the good work; your poetry gets better and better.
Wow. I am shocked at your age especially with writing something so meaningful and thought provoking.
I like how you use childhood games within the piece to mask something child like when in all honesty it isn't. This piece shows (I feel) that in your short life you have loved and been hurt. I do believe though that Ether is correct and the bleeding of knees is for beauty and attraction being lost but also, love.
What an inspirational piece or free verse.