This Time (Etheree)

by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist   Jan 23, 2017


~~~~~~~~~*0o0*~~~~~~~~~~
I cannot waste this opportunity,
I will say that I love you truly.
Second, minutes, and hour counts,
You're placed in a plain gold mount.
Bring all the happiness,
I'm now defenseless,
Ready to take
A heartbreak,
From you,
True.
I
Can see
My today,
My Tomorrow,
Without a sorrow,
With you life is pleasant.
I guess?But yes I am blessed,
With cleverness, you ought possessed,
This heart, engraved with your signature,
My mind, that knows that you are the future.
~~~~~~~~~~~~*0o0*~~~~~~~~~~~~~

~~~~^O*GEL*0^~~~

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  • 5 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    This is STUNNING! Form-wise and content-wise! Yay, this is not easy to do! Great job!

  • 10 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This was really great. Michael set a really challenging...challenge! and you more than rose to the occasion with this. It's wonderfully executed.
    I read this before but I'm sorry I failed to comment sooner.

    Take care,

    Ben

  • 10 months ago

    by stormingdance (Jessica)

    Absolutely lovely! Great write!

  • 10 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Gel,

    One of the wonderful things about this form is the way they look. I like poems that are presented well and this double Etheree, working from 10 syllables down to one and then back to ten is remarkable; it looks rather like an egg timer.

    The fact this form looks like a timer is apt. Your poem talks about time, seconds, minutes and hours. Reassuring a lover that this time is their chance to repair a heartbreak. I like the mention of a gold broach, and the fact it contains a lovers photo, a memory of lasting love also connects this with the theme time. The way you end the poem, connecting time and love together by mentioning a heart being engraved shows that this time is forever.

    Gel, well done - I am sorry this one passed me by.

    Take care.

    • 10 months ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Awww. .. thought you will say so....Thanks Sir. ...comment appreciated. .

      Gel

  • 10 months ago

    by Em

    Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful piece!!

    Well done

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