Comments : This Time (Etheree)

  • 8 months ago

    by Brenda

    Gel, I just adore this etheree! And your write mirrors the hour glass shape to a T! Well done-

  • 8 months ago

    by Em

    Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful piece!!

    Well done

  • 8 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Gel,

    One of the wonderful things about this form is the way they look. I like poems that are presented well and this double Etheree, working from 10 syllables down to one and then back to ten is remarkable; it looks rather like an egg timer.

    The fact this form looks like a timer is apt. Your poem talks about time, seconds, minutes and hours. Reassuring a lover that this time is their chance to repair a heartbreak. I like the mention of a gold broach, and the fact it contains a lovers photo, a memory of lasting love also connects this with the theme time. The way you end the poem, connecting time and love together by mentioning a heart being engraved shows that this time is forever.

    Gel, well done - I am sorry this one passed me by.

    Take care.

  • 8 months ago

    by stormingdance (Jessica)

    Absolutely lovely! Great write!

  • 8 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This was really great. Michael set a really challenging...challenge! and you more than rose to the occasion with this. It's wonderfully executed.
    I read this before but I'm sorry I failed to comment sooner.

    Take care,

    Ben

  • 3 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    This is STUNNING! Form-wise and content-wise! Yay, this is not easy to do! Great job!