Comments : Cleaning house

  • 1 year ago

    by Ren

    Brenda, this is absolutely amazing and powerful and so liberating!! I truly adore this piece by you- it made me smile and nod and sorta raise my fist in the air and want to scream "you go girl!"

    "I took my playbook
    of self regret,
    doused it with gas
    and lit that b**** up.
    scooping up the ashes
    I headed out to sea
    where I scattered them
    into the deep,
    never ever wanting them
    to wash ashore
    for a devious siren
    to use against me..."

    These lines are just awesome awesome AWESOME!

    Fantabulous write!!

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Ren, thank you so much! It was about time I buried the past, lol. Its a whole lot easier living when you aren't weighed down by past regrets. I'm so glad you liked this! Hugs! P.s. thank you so much for the nomination- that really means a lot.

  • 1 year ago

    by Phil

    Fantastic and needs nominating. I know its not all about that but recognition is nice, isn't it!!

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Phil. I appreciate your thoughts.

  • 1 year ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    I absolutely love this piece Brenda and I so can relate. I agree the older we get the wiser we get and we start paying attention to what is truly important. All that other stuff is history. All the very best and hugs

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Dagmar! Unfortunately some people never get wiser as they age. Hugs to you my friend.

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    and lit that b**** up.

    ^^

    A metaphor rich poem but this one is my favourite. It is so brutal and has such obvious anger and a real determination not to succumb and be the victim.
    Well done on this and I'm glad it's nominated; I'm all out!

    All the best, Brenda,

    Ben

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Ben! I really appreciate your comments and I am so glad you liked it. That particular line is one of my favorites too.

  • 1 year ago

    by Lvi

    Amazing !

    Just me, older, wiser,
    finally at peace...

    ^^
    It indeed is a wise act.

    Enjoyed the piece throughout :)

    Lvi

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much! I appreciate you...

  • 1 year ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Brenda,
    Everyone has already pulled this apart and commented.. so all I can say is I love it. Well done.. If Ren hadnt nominated, i would have.

    :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Nams, thank you so much my friend! Hugs!

  • 1 year ago

    by ddavidd

    The emotional content in this piece is so palpable that you almost could touch it.

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Frank. It was this huge purge.

  • 1 year ago

    by Michael

    Hi Brenda

    Great piece of personal writing

    All the best

    Michael :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Michael, thank you so much. I really appreciate your comments-

  • 1 year ago

    by Poetess

    Amazing. I love how personal this feels.
    The first verse is definitely my favorite!

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you ever so much. It's funny you said the first verse, that was the loop stuck in my head for days, lol. I appreciate your comments.

  • 1 year ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Brenda this is a freakin wonderful write...

    "I headed out to sea
    where I scattered them
    into the deep,
    never ever wanting them
    to wash ashore
    for a devious siren
    to use against me"

    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

    This one right here?? K-I-L-L-E-R!

    Totally agree with Frank on this Very emotional and palpable write great visuals and control of language.

    Added to favs

    Ben

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Ben, thank you so much. I had fun with this write, thinking of ways to get rid of all that negative thought process. Hugs my friend-

  • 1 year ago

    by Pagan Paul

    A good attitude to have. The past is done, let it go - nice.
    Love the first stanza :)
    PPx

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you Paul, it's like spring cleaning lol

  • 1 year ago

    by mossgirl19

    Hi Brenda! Oh I wanted to do the same thing now. Clean things up and become wiser. This was a lovely piece, an inspiring one!

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Hi back to You! Thank you so much. I think we should all do some house cleaning, it's very freeing...

  • 11 months ago

    by Lucifer

    From start, till the end.
    After reading this, I am Finally at peace too. It means nothing left in my heart except love.
    I am sure whosoever has read this poem would have learned more than 2-3 things from it.

    optimistic!

    • 11 months ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much. Eventually we all just have to let it go..life is too short to dwell on all the bad choices and relationships.

  • 8 months ago

    by naaz

    Brenda, first of all, tell me the address of timbuktoo. I have too much weight of the past relationships upon this little heart of mine.
    Brenda, though it's a poem which tells about your sufferings, the mental trauma it gave you, yet I want to say I loved it the way you wrote it.
    What an amazing choice of words throughout the poem.
    I am still confused which lines to mention I love them the most, and especially in the first three stanzas.
    I tried to find the theme of the poem, but I feel more connected to it when I read it as your personal experience.
    Mood or emotions are regrets, bad choices, betrayal and most importantly self-confidence.
    I wish I could be as strong as you.
    I wish I could wrap and tape all my worries, bad choices in some solid box and shipped it in the middle of no where-- an address guaranteeing no return of them come what may.
    I wish I had the same strength to pick up the ashes of all those regrets inside my mind and throw them in the random directions deep into the sea so that they could never find the shore again.
    I wish I could go alone in the woods and bury all those relationships of the past to prevent my future from decaying.
    If I had all those qualities you have, my mind would be at peace with my soul.
    Sometimes, we are not that skillful to protect our mind from following the siren of devious directions.
    Sometimes, even going too deep into the forest of trust couldn't protect our love from decaying.
    Those who conquer all their fears of bad choices and regrets regarding the experiences of life get strength, like you.
    They don't criticize themselves. Obviously, it takes a part of their precious life, but made them much wiser, strong and finally leave them with peace in their heart.
    Brenda, the wiser, Please tell me how to clean the house, so that I could invite new emotions in my heart to accompany my soul.
    Loved it :)

    • 8 months ago

      by Brenda

      Naazz, thank you ever so much! It has taken me a lot of years to stop beating myself up over past mistakes. It's a continual thought process and mind set. It's far too easy to fall back into old habits. Letting go is a way to free ourselves and it feels like it took me a gazillion years to do that. Keep letting go, keep thinking positive, I'll dig up that address to Timbuktoo....You can do this!